Ello Ello!

crazycatcrazycat Join Date: 2004-08-27 Member: 30950Members
<div class="IPBDescription">help a brother out</div> i guess i should start off by saying that im new, that i like what ive seen, and that i think this is a great forum....

then i'll get right down to what i want to ask

i need someone to turn this into a song, cause i cant right them, i can right what i want to say, i just cant make it into a song, so i was hoping that if someone turned this into a song i could learn from it and do so by myself, give a man a fish and he eats for a night, teach a man to fish and etc etc...

Hustled

embarrassed and ashamed
you left me naked and confused
i sat by the phone waiting
for your call, stripped by your words

but i wont fall for your slight of hand again
i wont fall for your change of face

hand after hand you beat me with a trump
i just didnt see what was hidden up your sleave
a few randy smiles and a few kind words were all you needed
to bring me to my knees

but i wont fall for your slight of hand again
i wont fall for your change of face

you had me on your skirt tails
you had me on my knees
you had me flushed and trumped as well
from the moment we started this game

but i wont fall for you slight of hand again
i wont fall for your change of face

ive never been good at the game
but ive never really tried
i always played for fun
and expected the same

now i know better,
you sharks are out to feast
that poker face doesnt fool me any more
you cant hide your feelings

its obvious your not holding ****
so you can quit your pretending,
im not going to fold this time
cause ive played my hand and now im done
i'll save my chips and play with somone else
someone whose just in it for the fun.

Comments

  • ChronoChrono Local flyboy Join Date: 2003-08-05 Member: 18989Members
    edited August 2004
  • POOP_AkiraPOOP_Akira Join Date: 2003-11-23 Member: 23468Members
    I tried for a while, this was all I was able to get: <a href='http://www.ebaumsworld.com/lalahoohoo.html' target='_blank'>I changed the words around a bit.</a>
  • DubbilexDubbilex Chump Join Date: 2002-11-24 Member: 9799Members
    (beware - forumgoers can be jerks)
  • Crono5Crono5 Join Date: 2003-07-22 Member: 18357Members
    <!--QuoteBegin-<[POOP]> Akira+Aug 27 2004, 08:18 PM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> (<[POOP]> Akira @ Aug 27 2004, 08:18 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> I tried for a while, this was all I was able to get: <a href='http://www.ebaumsworld.com/lalahoohoo.html' target='_blank'>I changed the words around a bit.</a> <!--QuoteEnd--> </td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'> <!--QuoteEEnd-->
    What...

    The...

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  • RatonetwothreetwooneRatonetwothreetwoone Join Date: 2004-03-23 Member: 27504Members
    sounds like something megadeth would sing... maybe i just think that cuz ive been listening to them for a while
  • POOP_AkiraPOOP_Akira Join Date: 2003-11-23 Member: 23468Members
    <!--QuoteBegin-Dubbilex+Aug 27 2004, 08:33 PM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> (Dubbilex @ Aug 27 2004, 08:33 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> (beware - forumgoers can be jerks) <!--QuoteEnd--> </td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'> <!--QuoteEEnd-->
    (some may also make posts just for +1s/and or ranting)

    Im just bringing up some fun... I needed some excuse to post it.
    Crazycat if youd like that removed just tell meh, ill get rid of it.

    And welcome to the boards! <!--emo&::tsa::--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/tsa.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='tsa.gif' /><!--endemo-->
  • HazeHaze O RLY? Join Date: 2003-07-07 Member: 18018Members, Constellation
    Dude, just say everything really fast with a realitive beat in the backround and its a song. Thats what most of the crap "artists" are pumping out these days.

    You might refer to it as "rap" but just stick a c in front and it becomes "crap"

    I should rap a song like that.
  • CommunistWithAGunCommunistWithAGun Local Propaganda Guy Join Date: 2003-04-30 Member: 15953Members
    <!--QuoteBegin-Dubbilex+Aug 27 2004, 08:33 PM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> (Dubbilex @ Aug 27 2004, 08:33 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> (beware - forumgoers can be jerks) <!--QuoteEnd--> </td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'> <!--QuoteEEnd-->
    YOU JERK!


    (bad joke I know)
  • RedfordRedford Monorailcatfjord Join Date: 2002-04-28 Member: 528Members, NS1 Playtester
    edited August 2004
    I suppose that you could officially call this "poety", allthough by my point in time I've come to release that ANY arrangement of words could be considered poety as long as it has some inner meaning to both the person who wrote it and possibly the person reading it.


    So - does it have emotinal significance to you? If so it is poetry and nothing needs to be changed. If it doesn't communicate your feelings perfectly, then tweak it until it does. What is considered poetry by another is unimportant as long as you yourself consider it important to you.

    Of course, if you're going for extra credit, if you can make it mean somthing to both people, you get five bonus points - which is a goal most poets strive for. Don't worry if you can't do it at first. Be satisifed in arraging words in a manner that effectivly communicates your inner feelings which can be nearly impossible given certain situations.


    Deep, I know. o.o
  • enf0rcerenf0rcer intrigued... Join Date: 2003-03-16 Member: 14584Members
    the lyrics don't render themselves well to song-age. Unless you sing it slowly and totally ignore the stanzas it just sounds strange no matter how you go at it.
  • crazycatcrazycat Join Date: 2004-08-27 Member: 30950Members
    it is what i wanted to express already, i think everyone gets it, its not quite subtle, the problem is that i write like that, i could give you more examples but they'd just make me look worse, the problem is that i cant write songs, i was hoping someone else could twist this around to form one and from looking at that song i could get a sense of what to do, because looking and hearing songs sure doesnt help me!

    as for the flash video
    extremely dissapointing, i thought you'd helped me out, and only mildy amusing, but i think it was cleverly placed and as you said you wanted to show it off so no harsh feelings guvner
  • MoquiaoMoquiao Join Date: 2003-05-09 Member: 16168Members
    sup... nice lyrics if i had skill i would do somethin
  • DubbilexDubbilex Chump Join Date: 2002-11-24 Member: 9799Members
    <!--QuoteBegin-CommunistWithAGun+Aug 27 2004, 10:43 PM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> (CommunistWithAGun @ Aug 27 2004, 10:43 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--><!--QuoteBegin-Dubbilex+Aug 27 2004, 08:33 PM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> (Dubbilex @ Aug 27 2004, 08:33 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> (beware - forumgoers can be jerks) <!--QuoteEnd--></td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'><!--QuoteEEnd-->
    YOU JERK!


    (bad joke I know)<!--QuoteEnd--></td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'><!--QuoteEEnd-->
    :*(

    Anywho, that was more of a <i>pre-emptive</i> warning, for when the commies come out to play.
  • crazycatcrazycat Join Date: 2004-08-27 Member: 30950Members
    well its good to see that you guys have a sense of humour, too bad its not a better one <!--emo&:D--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/biggrin-fix.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='biggrin-fix.gif' /><!--endemo-->

    but in all serious thanks for the welcome and advice, (though there wasnt too much of that,)

    and one last question, whats really the hot spot in this forum? where do the majority go to post?
  • jumpingjodajumpingjoda Join Date: 2003-12-14 Member: 24367Members, Constellation, Reinforced - Shadow
    edited August 2004
    Uhm pretty much everywhere >.<
    You must take some time if you want to see everything, lets say 24/7 should be enough.
    Off-topic and general discusion are the most active i think.
  • ShazbotShazbot Join Date: 2003-03-05 Member: 14328Members
    <!--QuoteBegin-<[POOP]> Akira+Aug 27 2004, 08:18 PM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> (<[POOP]> Akira @ Aug 27 2004, 08:18 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> I tried for a while, this was all I was able to get: <a href='http://www.ebaumsworld.com/lalahoohoo.html' target='_blank'>I changed the words around a bit.</a> <!--QuoteEnd--> </td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'> <!--QuoteEEnd-->
    That was disturbing...

    Welcome to the boards crazycat,

    I'm usually hanging out in the customization forum, the models and such that people make I find truely amazing. Wish I could model ... *whimper*... someday!
  • SurgeSurge asda4a3sklflkgh Join Date: 2002-07-14 Member: 944Members
  • ZeroByteZeroByte Join Date: 2002-11-01 Member: 3057Members
    Hmm.. the song isn't so bad. It's singable with a few changes here and there. I'm playing around with the lyrics right now. We'll see..
  • crazycatcrazycat Join Date: 2004-08-27 Member: 30950Members
    thanks zerobyte, be sure to post that when your done, i reallly would appreciate it <!--emo&:D--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/biggrin-fix.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='biggrin-fix.gif' /><!--endemo-->

    i have so many poems that were meant to be songs, i just cant make a song, it doesnt matter what i do, my brother says it'll help when i learn the guitar, but so far all ive got down is the meow mix song, 5-4-2-0, 5-4-2-0, 5-4-5-6-7-4-2-0 (all on any string)
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