End Of A Dream.

TresthTresth Join Date: 2002-11-03 Member: 5602Members, Constellation
<div class="IPBDescription">A poem by me.</div> <i><b>End of a dream</b></i>

<i>On this one night, I gazed at the dark sky,
A tear of sorrow falling down my cheek.
This old dream was ending with a long sigh.
I heard you whisper “Was it all a lie?”
It faded away before I could speak.

Pray for me, please ask me to be reborn.
Close my eyes, in yours I saw the twilight.

Lone fool lost in a storm in the shadows.
I became but a heart frozen in time,
Engulfed in the flames of a blazing rose.
Walking to my demise, my soul arose
Asking for one more chance to be sublime.

Pray for me, please ask me to be reborn.
Close my eyes, in yours I saw the moonlight.

In my despair, they’ve shown me their delight,
They in the dark have granted your prayer.
On my soft wings, I went for my last flight,
They told me “May this be your final night.”
I breathed my last with my hands in your hair.

Pray for me, please ask me to be reborn.
Close my eyes, in yours I saw the sunlight.</i>

<span style='font-size:8pt;line-height:100%'> Paul “Tresth” Nicollet</span>

A little something I made yesterday, thought I might share it with you aswell.
Feel free to comment.

Oh. I have the strong feeling that it's complete, so I won't make changes to it.
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  • kuperayekuperaye Join Date: 2003-03-14 Member: 14519Members, Constellation
    sounds a bit emoish to me :/
  • TequilaTequila Join Date: 2003-08-13 Member: 19660Members
    edited March 2005
    Reminds me of Hall & Oates:

    <img src='http://www.urbanhonking.com/greatestband/archives/bigbamtour.jpg' border='0' alt='user posted image' />
  • twoflowtwoflow Singing Drunk Join Date: 2002-11-01 Member: 1950Members, Constellation
    <img src='http://bodyslamming.com/wwe/pics/john2.jpg' border='0' alt='user posted image' />
  • DuluozDuluoz Join Date: 2004-09-29 Member: 31986Members
    <b><i>Kiss On My List</i></b>

    <i>My friends wonder why I call you all of the time
    What can I say
    I don't feel the need to give such secrets away
    You think maybe I need help, no, I know that I'm right
    I'm just better off not listening to friends' advice

    When they insist on knowing my bliss
    I tell them this
    When they want to know what the reason is
    I only smile when I lie, then I tell them why
    (Because your kiss) your kiss is on my list
    (Because your kiss) your kiss is on my list
    Because your kiss is on my list of the best things in life
    (Because your kiss) your kiss is on my list
    (Because your kiss) your kiss I can't resist
    Because your kiss it's what If miss when If turn off the lights

    I go crazy wondering what there is to really see
    Did the night just take up your time, 'cause it means more to me
    Sometimes I forget what I'm doing, I don't forget what I want
    Regret what I've done, regret you? I couldn't go on
    And if you insist on knowing my bliss

    I'll tell you this
    If you want to know what the reason is
    I'll only smile when I lie, then I'll tell you why
    (Because your kiss) your kiss is on my list
    (Because your kiss) your kiss I can't resist
    Because your kiss it's what If miss when If turn off the lights

    (Because your kiss) your kiss is on my list
    (Because your kiss) your kiss is on my list
    Because your kiss is on my list of the best things in life
    (Because your kiss) your kiss is on my list
    (Because your kiss) your kiss I can't resist
    Because your kiss it's what If miss when If turn off the lights</i>

    It had to be done.
  • groKKingmImIgroKKingmImI Join Date: 2005-01-09 Member: 34003Members
    edited March 2005
    uhm gg i didn't even read the post before me

    Shape Of My Heart


    Hmm, yeah, yeah
    Baby, please try to forgive me
    Stay here don't put out the glow
    Hold me now don't bother
    If every minute it makes me weaker
    You can save me from the man that I've become, oh yeah

    Lookin' back on the things I've done
    I was tryin' to be someone
    I played my part
    And kept you in the dark
    Now let me show you the shape of my heart

    Sadness is beautiful
    Loneliness is tragical
    So help me I can't win this war, oh no
    Touch me now don't bother
    If every second it makes me weaker
    You can save me from the man I've become

    Lookin' back on the things I've done (back on the things...)
    I was tryin' to be someone (tryin' to be...)
    I played my part
    And kept you in the dark (in the dark)
    Now let me show you the shape of my heart

    I'm here with my confession
    Got nothin' to hide no more
    I dont know where to start
    But to show you the shape of my heart

    I'm lookin' back on things I've done
    I never wanna play the same old part
    I'll keep you (keep you in the dark) in the dark
    Now let me show you the shape of my heart

    Lookin' back on the things I've done
    I was tryin' to be someone (tryin' to be someone)
    I played my part
    Kept you in the dark
    Now let me show (Now let me show you the true)
    you the shape (shape of my heart) of my heart

    Lookin' back on the things I've done
    I was tryin' to be someone
    I played my part
    And kept you in the dark
    Now let me show you the shape of

    Show you the shape of my heart

    /obligatory.
  • ShockehShockeh If a packet drops on the web and nobody&#39;s near to see it... Join Date: 2002-11-19 Member: 9336NS1 Playtester, Forum Moderators, Constellation
    On the one hand....

    "It's awesome, in this modern day & age, people still display the creativity that is humanity's birthright."

    On the other....

    "EMO! EMO! EMO! Change your nick to xBurningheartintheashesoftheunicorngrovex, kthx"

    <!--emo&;)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/wink-fix.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='wink-fix.gif' /><!--endemo-->

    - Shockwave

    P.S Wub Tresth, you know I wub you.
  • TequilaTequila Join Date: 2003-08-13 Member: 19660Members
    <!--QuoteBegin-Shockwave+Mar 29 2005, 06:44 PM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> (Shockwave @ Mar 29 2005, 06:44 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> P.S Wub Tresth, you know I wub you. <!--QuoteEnd--> </td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'> <!--QuoteEEnd-->
    Groan.
  • Private_ColemanPrivate_Coleman PhD in Video Games Join Date: 2002-11-07 Member: 7510Members
    <i>Yummy, Yummy, Yummy.
    I got love in my tummy,
    And I feel like a-lovin you:
    Love, you're such a sweet thing,
    Good enough to eat thing
    And that's just a-what I'm gonna do.
    Ooh love, to hold ya,
    Ooh love, to kiss ya,
    Ooh love, I love it so.
    Ooh love, you're sweeter,
    Sweeter than sugar.
    Ooh love, I wont let you go.

    Yummy, Yummy, Yummy,
    I got love in my tummy,
    And as silly as it may seem;
    The lovin' that you re giving,
    is what keeps me livin'
    And your love is like
    Peaches and cream.
    Kind-a like sugar,
    Kind-a like spices,
    Kind-a like, like what you do.
    Kind-a sounds funny.
    But love,honey
    Honey. I love you.

    Yummy, Yummy, Yummy,
    I. got love in my tummy,
    That your love can satisfy;
    Love, you're such a sweet thing,
    Good enough to eat thing
    And sweet thing, that ain't no lie.
    I love to hold ya,
    Oh love, to kiss ya,
    Ooh love, I love it so.
    Ooh love, you're sweeter,
    Sweeter than sugar.
    Ooh love, I wont let you go.</i>
  • Cold_NiTeCold_NiTe Join Date: 2003-09-15 Member: 20875Members
    Coleman: 1
    World: 0
  • AlienCowAlienCow Join Date: 2003-09-20 Member: 21040Members
    I think thats a wonderful poem despite all of the mockery around here. Makes me think of AFI - its dark and depressing, but beautiful at the same time.
  • SpacerSpacer Invented dogs Join Date: 2003-05-02 Member: 16008Members
    Art forum? Does poetry go in the art forum?
  • Cold_NiTeCold_NiTe Join Date: 2003-09-15 Member: 20875Members
    <!--QuoteBegin-Spacer+Mar 29 2005, 04:49 PM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> (Spacer @ Mar 29 2005, 04:49 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> Art forum? Does poetry go in the art forum? <!--QuoteEnd--> </td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'> <!--QuoteEEnd-->
    This thread is art, if not for Coleman's post alone.
  • reasareasa Join Date: 2002-11-10 Member: 8010Members, Constellation
    <img src='http://www.cs.rpi.edu/~sibel/poetry/images/esra.gif' border='0' alt='user posted image' />
  • OmegamanOmegaman Join Date: 2004-01-11 Member: 25239Members
    <a href='http://www.archivestowearpantsto.com/tracks/0159_bossa_bye_baby.mp3' target='_blank'>Trismic Wins.</a>
  • Cold_NiTeCold_NiTe Join Date: 2003-09-15 Member: 20875Members
    Ladies and Gentlemen a new contender has appeared.
  • MrRadicalEdMrRadicalEd Turrent Master Join Date: 2004-08-13 Member: 30601Members
  • reasareasa Join Date: 2002-11-10 Member: 8010Members, Constellation
    edited March 2005
    <img src='http://www.singaporegymnastics.org/images/GSGS%20logo.jpg' border='0' alt='user posted image' />
  • BulletHeadBulletHead Join Date: 2004-07-22 Member: 30049Members
    <!--QuoteBegin--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> </td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin-->Maybe our hearts, beating in time
    Allowing our thoughts, our thinking in rhyme
    We see deep inside the hearts of each other
    And inside ourselves, a father and mother

    Maybe our dreams, which speak of unrest
    Need to be spoken, simply a test
    To see if our love, is more than skin deep
    If so great rewards are what we will reap

    Maybe our eyes, longing and dire
    A gateway to our soul, our own inner fire
    They show us the way, allowing us peace
    And sometimes deceive us, showing a beast

    Maybe our love, spoken today
    Is guiding our future, showing the way
    It helps us live on, when day turns to night
    It helps us forgive, each little fight

    Our children will go, and live on tomorrow
    So swallow our pride, tell of our sorrow
    I see pain inside you, a deep wounding scar
    Unhealed and unheard, it’s followed thus far

    It won’t go away, not on its own
    You’re heart is its place, its own little home
    Don’t let it control you, you are its boss
    Allow me to take it, and help bear you’re cross

    Maybe you’re fond, of hearing me say
    How dear I love you, in each little way
    I wish I could help you, relinquish you’re fear
    Cause the love that we have, I hold it dear

    Maybe it’s you, that’s showed me the way
    And helped me find light, in every day
    You saved my life dear, your love as it would
    And you’ve helped me to see, all that is good

    Maybe it’s me, holding you close
    Through every day, the love is a rose
    It hurt only one way, deep down in my heart
    Maybe, some day, we won’t be apart
    <!--QuoteEnd--></td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'><!--QuoteEEnd-->

    I know it sucks... no need to tell me...
  • groKKingmImIgroKKingmImI Join Date: 2005-01-09 Member: 34003Members
    My life is a dark pool of blackness
    falling
    dropping
    my dark soul cries out but no one listens
    I saw the eyes of Death...
    the blade kisses me deeply
    though i breathe i am not truly alive
    the blood that i have bleed for thee
    screaming
    i am fallen and will never rise
    life is my blood
    endless bleak night

    masterpiece
  • MedHeadMedHead Join Date: 2002-12-19 Member: 11115Members, Constellation
    Sorry Tresth, I don't get it.
  • Private_ColemanPrivate_Coleman PhD in Video Games Join Date: 2002-11-07 Member: 7510Members
    <!--QuoteBegin-Cold NiTe+Mar 29 2005, 04:35 PM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> (Cold NiTe @ Mar 29 2005, 04:35 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> Coleman: 1
    World: 0 <!--QuoteEnd--> </td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'> <!--QuoteEEnd-->
    So true ... so true.
  • ZeroByteZeroByte Join Date: 2002-11-01 Member: 3057Members
    <!--QuoteBegin-reasa+Mar 30 2005, 06:38 AM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> (reasa @ Mar 30 2005, 06:38 AM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> <img src='http://www.singaporegymnastics.org/images/GSGS%20logo.jpg' border='0' alt='user posted image' /> <!--QuoteEnd--> </td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'> <!--QuoteEEnd-->
    Eh?

    <!--QuoteBegin--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> </td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin-->My heart as black
    As my grandmas toenails
    Deep under
    Buried with grandfather

    My heart bleeds
    Red
    Like a tampon
    Used<!--QuoteEnd--></td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'><!--QuoteEEnd-->

    Ohhhh yeah. I am such a genius.
  • TestamentTestament Join Date: 2002-11-02 Member: 4037Members
    I never understood poetry. I hate the setup of it all. The way you read it makes it make no sense. It's wishy-washy, whiny, and almost never makes sense. Except for the Iliad, which is awesome, because it has huge, half-naked Trojan warriors cutting people in half. But even then I hated the poetry.
  • twoflowtwoflow Singing Drunk Join Date: 2002-11-01 Member: 1950Members, Constellation
    edited March 2005
    <!--QuoteBegin-ZeroByte+Mar 30 2005, 11:47 AM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> (ZeroByte @ Mar 30 2005, 11:47 AM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> My heart as black
    As my grandmas toenails
    Deep under
    Buried with grandfather

    My heart bleeds
    Red
    Like a tampon
    Used<!--QuoteEnd--></td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'><!--QuoteEEnd-->
    Excellent!
  • TequilaTequila Join Date: 2003-08-13 Member: 19660Members
    <!--QuoteBegin-Private Coleman+Mar 29 2005, 10:31 PM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> (Private Coleman @ Mar 29 2005, 10:31 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> <i>Yummy, Yummy, Yummy.
    I got love in my tummy,
    And I feel like a-lovin you:
    Love, you're such a sweet thing,
    Good enough to eat thing
    And that's just a-what I'm gonna do.
    Ooh love, to hold ya,
    Ooh love, to kiss ya,
    Ooh love, I love it so.
    Ooh love, you're sweeter,
    Sweeter than sugar.
    Ooh love, I wont let you go.

    Yummy, Yummy, Yummy,
    I got love in my tummy,
    And as silly as it may seem;
    The lovin' that you re giving,
    is what keeps me livin'
    And your love is like
    Peaches and cream.
    Kind-a like sugar,
    Kind-a like spices,
    Kind-a like, like what you do.
    Kind-a sounds funny.
    But love,honey
    Honey. I love you.

    Yummy, Yummy, Yummy,
    I. got love in my tummy,
    That your love can satisfy;
    Love, you're such a sweet thing,
    Good enough to eat thing
    And sweet thing, that ain't no lie.
    I love to hold ya,
    Oh love, to kiss ya,
    Ooh love, I love it so.
    Ooh love, you're sweeter,
    Sweeter than sugar.
    Ooh love, I wont let you go.</i> <!--QuoteEnd--> </td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'> <!--QuoteEEnd-->
    Obvious / 10.
  • Cold_NiTeCold_NiTe Join Date: 2003-09-15 Member: 20875Members
    <!--QuoteBegin-twoflow+Mar 30 2005, 12:32 PM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> (twoflow @ Mar 30 2005, 12:32 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> <!--QuoteBegin-ZeroByte+Mar 30 2005, 11:47 AM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> (ZeroByte @ Mar 30 2005, 11:47 AM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> My heart as black
    As my grandmas toenails
    Deep under
    Buried with grandfather

    My heart bleeds
    Red
    Like a tampon
    Used<!--QuoteEnd--></td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'><!--QuoteEEnd-->
    Excellent! <!--QuoteEnd--> </td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'> <!--QuoteEEnd-->
    Good use of Imagery and Sentence Structure.

    Zerobyte gets an A.
  • SpacerSpacer Invented dogs Join Date: 2003-05-02 Member: 16008Members
    <!--QuoteBegin--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> </td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin-->God gave rock and roll to you, gave rock and roll to you
    Put it in the soul of everyone
    Do you know what you want? You don't know for sure
    You don't feel right, you can't find a cure
    And you're gettin' less than what you're lookin' for

    You don't have money or a fancy car
    And you're tired of wishin' on a falling star
    You gotta put your faith in a loud guitar

    God gave rock and roll to you, gave rock and roll to you
    Gave rock and roll to everyone (oh yeah)
    God gave rock and roll to you, gave rock and roll to you
    Put it in the soul of everyone

    "Now listen"
    If you wanna be a singer, or play guitar
    Man, you gotta sweat or you won't get far
    Cause it's never too late to work nine-to-five

    You can take a stand, or you can compromise
    You can work real hard or just fantasize
    But you don't start livin' till you realize - "I gotta tell ya!"

    God gave rock and roll to you, gave rock and roll to you
    Gave rock and roll to everyone
    God gave rock and roll to you, gave rock and roll to you
    Put it in the soul

    God gave rock and roll to you (to everyone he gave the song to be sung)
    Gave rock and roll to you, gave rock and roll to everyone

    God gave rock and roll to you (to everyone he gave the song to be sung)
    Gave rock and roll to you, saved rock and roll for everyone
    Saved rock and roll

    "I know life sometimes can get tough! And I know life sometimes can be a drag!
    But people, we have been given a gift, we have been given a road
    And that road's name is... Rock and Roll!"<!--QuoteEnd--></td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'><!--QuoteEEnd-->
  • AbraAbra Would you kindly Join Date: 2003-08-17 Member: 19870Members
    Poems the source of evil, and low grades.
  • stainyoustainyou Join Date: 2005-03-30 Member: 46978Members
    <img src='http://www.coye.de/coyemain/emo_boy.jpg' border='0' alt='user posted image' />
  • Cold_NiTeCold_NiTe Join Date: 2003-09-15 Member: 20875Members
    Oh my god. I love it.
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