SinSpawnHarbinger of SufferingJoin Date: 2002-11-12Member: 8359Members
The thing is I wanna know how old are you? Do the thing that comprox said, prescribe some genetils and go ask!
confidence = teh win
@Otto
Dude!! if I were a woman i'd be woo'd already <!--emo&:D--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/biggrin-fix.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='biggrin-fix.gif' /><!--endemo-->
I can see you put your heart into this, id say if you already gave it to her then you should be getting some kind of reply. Good or bad depends on her, but it sounds great to me, so im saying it should be a good reply.
Don't give up - just listen to some of these people and take a more direct approach. A love letter while sweet doesn't stack up to a face to face heart-felt conversation.
...I may be late with my feedback, but I considered this line to be somewhat of a threat. I would seriously consider revising or ditching it before giving it out. It raises red flags for me.
<!--QuoteBegin--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> </td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin-->...i know you wouldnt hurt me because i know that you'd regret it. <!--QuoteEnd--></td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'><!--QuoteEEnd-->
<!--QuoteBegin-Dubbilex+Jun 8 2005, 08:26 AM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> (Dubbilex @ Jun 8 2005, 08:26 AM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> You're not a girl <!--emo&:(--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/sad-fix.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='sad-fix.gif' /><!--endemo-->
unless . . . OH - <!--QuoteEnd--> </td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'> <!--QuoteEEnd--> No, I'm not female. I'm straight, so don't go there!
I know that I wouldn't be able to understand a woman's emotional state correctly at all times, but I think I can get a <b>few</b> instances right. Besides, the writer was male, and he too likely doesn't fully understand a woman's emotional state: if he thinks it sounds good, another male should think it sounds good as well. Whether or not a female would think the letter is written well is another matter, but at least the males, of which have a more similar emotional state, should be able to understand and like the letter.
I'm just going to ask her who she wants to be with, and if she doesn't want to be with me then so-bea it. I just want her to be happy and that's all. But if that guy EVER hurts her, I'm gonna break him in half.
<!--QuoteBegin-Private Coleman+Jun 8 2005, 10:59 AM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> (Private Coleman @ Jun 8 2005, 10:59 AM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> A man in a concrete room. There is a big pipe in the ceiling, which water flows out of. He can escape if he reaches the top of the room. There are no handholds and cannot climb out by himself. He happens to be very good at treading water. He can only escape by climbing up the ladder. The pipe has a metal covering preventing him from climbing into it.
You have a lever in your hand. When you are not acting force upon the lever, no water is expelled. You can pull the lever to allow water to flow into the room. The harder you pull, the greater the force and volume of water will be expelled at once. <img src='http://img110.echo.cx/img110/273/piperoom12br.jpg' border='0' alt='user posted image' />
You have the man's best interests at heart. He wants to escape the room. If you do not pull the lever, he will die from starvation. He can only tread water for a certain amount of time until he will drown.
The next picture is quite graphic, so I give you forewarning.
Now, compare this scenario to you and this girl. The water is your emotions. She is the man (haw haw) and you are the one with the lever in your hand. The ladder escape route is "happily ever after". <!--QuoteEnd--> </td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'> <!--QuoteEEnd--> Am I the only one who gets it?
I get it now lol. Don't pull switches and levers that you aren't ready to pull. And if you pull them too early, you'll drown and sharks with frikin lazer beams attatched to their heads will blast u down and chomp u up bwhahahaa.... i mean... yeah lol
Life sucks, love sucks. I think letters and roses and all that malarkey is romantic, but whatever <!--emo&:p--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/tounge.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='tounge.gif' /><!--endemo--> Thats probably coz I suck at life.
It's not very direct, and doesn't show one persons emotion to another, but rather that of two people who want one another but can't really have them.
*shrugs* Not really sure why I'm putting this here... I had a reson but I just had a coughing fit and now I can't remember what that reason was...
*bish slaps his hayfever*
<!--QuoteBegin--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> </td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin-->Maybe our hearts, beating in time Allowing our thoughts, our thinking in rhyme We see deep inside the hearts of each other And inside ourselves, a father and mother
Maybe our dreams, which speak of unrest Need to be spoken, simply a test To see if our love, is more than skin deep If so great rewards are what we will reap
Maybe our eyes, longing and dire A gateway to our soul, our own inner fire They show us the way, allowing us peace And sometimes deceive us, showing a beast
Maybe our love, spoken today Is guiding our future, showing the way It helps us live on, when day turns to night It helps us forgive, each little fight
Our children will go, and live on tomorrow So swallow our pride, tell of our sorrow I see pain inside you, a deep wounding scar Unhealed and unheard, it’s followed thus far
It won’t go away, not on its own You’re heart is its place, its own little home Don’t let it control you, you are its boss Allow me to take it, and help bear you’re cross
Maybe you’re fond, of hearing me say How dear I love you, in each little way I wish I could help you, relinquish you’re fear Cause the love that we have, I hold it dear
Maybe it’s you, that’s showed me the way And helped me find light, in every day You saved my life dear, your love as it would And you’ve helped me to see, all that is good
Maybe it’s me, holding you close Through every day, the love is a rose It hurt only one way, deep down in my heart Maybe, some day, we won’t be apart <!--QuoteEnd--></td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'><!--QuoteEEnd-->
<!--QuoteBegin-Xyth+Jun 8 2005, 03:17 PM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> (Xyth @ Jun 8 2005, 03:17 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> The best pickup line ever. This has been passed through generations and generations of my family. It's proved for success. Get ready...
"Hey baby, I got a minute. Wanna get lucky?"
Try it. <!--QuoteEnd--> </td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'> <!--QuoteEEnd--> I am pretty curious, how you want to make "a human beeing of female gender" <!--emo&;)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/wink-fix.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='wink-fix.gif' /><!--endemo--> happy in only 1 minute.
I mean.....it usually takes whole 30 seconds to open the bra alone and 29 seconds to take care of the remaining clothing. What are you intending to do in the remaining second <!--emo&???--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/confused-fix.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='confused-fix.gif' /><!--endemo-->
Oh and you might want to express your feelings otherwise. Cut the whole thinking about it part and start talking witheout a day or two of preperation.
<!--QuoteBegin-Faskalia+Jun 8 2005, 02:59 PM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> (Faskalia @ Jun 8 2005, 02:59 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> I am pretty curious, how you want to make "a human beeing of female gender" <!--emo&;)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/wink-fix.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='wink-fix.gif' /><!--endemo--> happy in only 1 minute.
I mean.....it usually takes whole 30 seconds to open the bra alone and 29 seconds to take care of the remaining clothing. What are you intending to do in the remaining second <!--emo&???--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/confused-fix.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='confused-fix.gif' /><!--endemo-->
Oh and you might want to express your feelings otherwise. Cut the whole thinking about it part and start talking witheout a day or two of preperation. <!--QuoteEnd--> </td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'> <!--QuoteEEnd--> Well you can feel free to replace "Minute" with "Moment" to be less specific and open a larger timeframe. Then again, when was the last time somebody said "Gimme a second" to anything, and they actually only took a second?
<!--QuoteBegin-Faskalia+Jun 8 2005, 03:59 PM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> (Faskalia @ Jun 8 2005, 03:59 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> I am pretty curious, how you want to make "a human beeing of female gender" <!--emo&;)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/wink-fix.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='wink-fix.gif' /><!--endemo--> happy in only 1 minute.
I mean.....it usually takes whole 30 seconds to open the bra alone and 29 seconds to take care of the remaining clothing. <!--QuoteEnd--></td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'><!--QuoteEEnd--> You take a stopwatch to bed with you or something? I mean, I've heard of quick men, but...
[edited for on-topicness]To me, you sound WAY too desperate. You're 18 man. Since you're in love with a 17 year old, I'm guessing you're a senior in high school, which means that come next year, you 1) won't be in a relationship with her, or 2) will be in a long-distance + occasional meetings back home relationship. Option #1 is far more common. You sound way too needy (like, you got some stalker potential in that note, I think) for a high school romance. This line in particular blends romance and depression like I've never seen it before: <!--QuoteBegin--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> </td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin-->If i had to choose between meeting you or God. I'd meet you because I could always meet God after death.<!--QuoteEnd--></td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'><!--QuoteEEnd--> It's brilliant, but scary. If I were this girl, I'd be more likely to call a psychiatrist to take a look at you than to call you for a date. <!--emo&;)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/wink-fix.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='wink-fix.gif' /><!--endemo-->
Oh, and all you guys saying, "Poetry sucks, just grow some balls and ask her out," notice that the female replies to this thread have been more along the lines of, "This poem is more cliche/longwinded than emotional/touching." Conclusion: it's not WHAT you do, it's HOW you do it.
<!--QuoteBegin--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> </td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin-->You sound way too needy (like, you got some stalker potential in that note, I think)<!--QuoteEnd--></td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'><!--QuoteEEnd-->
Nice to know I don't just see psychos everywhere, Athena, but how about my comment on poetry vs. face-to-face? Is one inherently better than the other?
Sky, mediums are about how you use them. With text you can't impart tone directly - you can mostly just control the flow and weight of text by sentence structure and wordchoice. Used correctly, text can be perfectly charming - used clumsily, perfectly creepy or boring. The one good thing about text is that if its awkward, you roll it up into a ball, throw it in a paper bin and decide wether to forget about that persons blunder or freak out over it <!--emo&;)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/wink-fix.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='wink-fix.gif' /><!--endemo-->
Going face to face requires some setting of the mood, reading the other person right to do so, and getting in the right ballpark with your body language and vocal tone - its sometimes really not that easy. I've used written notes, when the surrounding situation was a bit awkward - but more of a flirtatious (yes, contrary to popular belief I can be) nature.
Generally thats a good rule of thumb anyway. Loveletters are fine if you already have some kind of relationship - hell, enough infatuation and someone might even enjoy a bag of illegible tripe like the first post of this thread. Otherwise though, strike the same tone that you would verbally if you don't really have anything or have had going with them - light, humorous, ironic quips and subtle flattery (just avoid biting insults, genius) - the usual games you play to arouse some interest.
I mean duh, why does this **** need to be typed out? Have you people not talked to females before? Wait... nevermind.
<!--QuoteBegin-Svenpa+Jun 8 2005, 02:07 PM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> (Svenpa @ Jun 8 2005, 02:07 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> <!--QuoteBegin-Private Coleman+Jun 8 2005, 10:59 AM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> (Private Coleman @ Jun 8 2005, 10:59 AM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> A man in a concrete room. There is a big pipe in the ceiling, which water flows out of. He can escape if he reaches the top of the room. There are no handholds and cannot climb out by himself. He happens to be very good at treading water. He can only escape by climbing up the ladder. The pipe has a metal covering preventing him from climbing into it.
You have a lever in your hand. When you are not acting force upon the lever, no water is expelled. You can pull the lever to allow water to flow into the room. The harder you pull, the greater the force and volume of water will be expelled at once. <img src='http://img110.echo.cx/img110/273/piperoom12br.jpg' border='0' alt='user posted image' />
You have the man's best interests at heart. He wants to escape the room. If you do not pull the lever, he will die from starvation. He can only tread water for a certain amount of time until he will drown.
The next picture is quite graphic, so I give you forewarning.
Now, compare this scenario to you and this girl. The water is your emotions. She is the man (haw haw) and you are the one with the lever in your hand. The ladder escape route is "happily ever after". <!--QuoteEnd--></td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'><!--QuoteEEnd--> Am I the only one who gets it? <!--QuoteEnd--> </td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'> <!--QuoteEEnd--> No it makes perfect sense to me. I guess the diagrams threw everyone else off? <!--emo&:p--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/tounge.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='tounge.gif' /><!--endemo-->
Cookiebooger, there's no point in all this planning and so on. If you can't do this naturally and casually, then it's going to cause you a lot of trouble.
Sky: Poetry never really did anything for me. Maybe it's just that I suck at empathy or something, but I just don't get anything out of it. But I also prefer face to face, because you can see the person's emotions as they say what they're trying to say, and even if they're nervous or stuttering or whatever, it tells me a lot more than a piece of paper.
But it's also easier for me to say things like that online through AIM and such, because we're *not* face to face - so there's that too.
Well I talked to her and told her that I'd stop buggin' her because she already likes someone else and that I shouldn't even try. She said she thought the letter was sweet and she cared about it.
I just don't care anymore, I'm moving on. She can ruin my heart but she can't ruin my life.
really. I read about every 5th word, and I think I got the gist of it. Man, I'm jaded. Love letters work on certain types of people, though. Hope whoever it was sent to was one of those types.
<!--QuoteBegin-Cookiebooger+Jun 8 2005, 07:14 PM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> (Cookiebooger @ Jun 8 2005, 07:14 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> We are among idiots Saltz =] But we are among great minds who are dead. <!--QuoteEnd--> </td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'> <!--QuoteEEnd--> You realize I insulted you, yes?
1.) I think that you did put a lot of feeling into that poem, and the girl would at least have to see that you have genuine feelings for her. It might be cliched, it might be needy, but you know what? Emotions have a lot more control over someone than their brain. Just like a man is controlled by his **** more than his brain, a woman is controlled by her emotions. Having said that, it does sound a bit too needy. Cut that down, and the rest is great.
2.) I got the diagram perfectly. You want to have the right force, but you give it too much, and all your hopes are shattered.
3.) Talking face to face with a girl requires a.) balls and b.) knowing the girl. For guys who are timid and shy and are better suited to writing out their feelings than speaking them, a poem is probably the best way.
Last but not least: I'm sorry for what happened, but i'm sure you'll find someone else. If you really think she's that one person, let her go, and if she comes back to you, she's yours forever. If she doesn't, then it was never meant to be.
Cliche FTW!
Saltz...you're mean. The guy came on asking for opinions on his letter, not opinions on whether it was a good idea. Lay off the guy.
<!--QuoteBegin-Cookiebooger+Jun 8 2005, 07:14 PM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> (Cookiebooger @ Jun 8 2005, 07:14 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> We are among idiots Saltz =] But we are among great minds who are dead. <!--QuoteEnd--> </td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'> <!--QuoteEEnd--> And I think I have insulted you too. Nice try but I'm more intelligent than that.
<!--QuoteBegin-CommunistWithAGun+Jun 8 2005, 09:59 PM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> (CommunistWithAGun @ Jun 8 2005, 09:59 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> I have no experience in this area because every love letter Ive written was laughed at and spit upon so yeah. <!--QuoteEnd--> </td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'> <!--QuoteEEnd--> Explains a lot...
And cookie, generally in order to classify as an "insult", the party that is supposed to be offended (and most everyone that is supposed to laugh at said offended party) should at the least have some comprehension of the nature of the insult.
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confidence = teh win
@Otto
Dude!! if I were a woman i'd be woo'd already <!--emo&:D--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/biggrin-fix.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='biggrin-fix.gif' /><!--endemo-->
...I may be late with my feedback, but I considered this line to be somewhat of a threat. I would seriously consider revising or ditching it before giving it out. It raises red flags for me.
<!--QuoteBegin--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> </td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin-->...i know you wouldnt hurt me because i know that you'd regret it. <!--QuoteEnd--></td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'><!--QuoteEEnd-->
unless . . . OH - <!--QuoteEnd--> </td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'> <!--QuoteEEnd-->
No, I'm not female. I'm straight, so don't go there!
I know that I wouldn't be able to understand a woman's emotional state correctly at all times, but I think I can get a <b>few</b> instances right. Besides, the writer was male, and he too likely doesn't fully understand a woman's emotional state: if he thinks it sounds good, another male should think it sounds good as well. Whether or not a female would think the letter is written well is another matter, but at least the males, of which have a more similar emotional state, should be able to understand and like the letter.
I'm just going to ask her who she wants to be with, and if she doesn't want to be with me then so-bea it. I just want her to be happy and that's all. But if that guy EVER hurts her, I'm gonna break him in half.
He happens to be very good at treading water. He can only escape by climbing up the ladder. The pipe has a metal covering preventing him from climbing into it.
You have a lever in your hand. When you are not acting force upon the lever, no water is expelled. You can pull the lever to allow water to flow into the room. The harder you pull, the greater the force and volume of water will be expelled at once.
<img src='http://img110.echo.cx/img110/273/piperoom12br.jpg' border='0' alt='user posted image' />
You have the man's best interests at heart. He wants to escape the room. If you do not pull the lever, he will die from starvation. He can only tread water for a certain amount of time until he will drown.
The next picture is quite graphic, so I give you forewarning.
This is what you very well could have done:
<img src='http://img110.echo.cx/img110/2752/piperoom22aa.jpg' border='0' alt='user posted image' />
Now, compare this scenario to you and this girl. The water is your emotions. She is the man (haw haw) and you are the one with the lever in your hand. The ladder escape route is "happily ever after". <!--QuoteEnd--> </td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'> <!--QuoteEEnd-->
Am I the only one who gets it?
It's not very direct, and doesn't show one persons emotion to another, but rather that of two people who want one another but can't really have them.
*shrugs* Not really sure why I'm putting this here... I had a reson but I just had a coughing fit and now I can't remember what that reason was...
*bish slaps his hayfever*
<!--QuoteBegin--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> </td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin-->Maybe our hearts, beating in time
Allowing our thoughts, our thinking in rhyme
We see deep inside the hearts of each other
And inside ourselves, a father and mother
Maybe our dreams, which speak of unrest
Need to be spoken, simply a test
To see if our love, is more than skin deep
If so great rewards are what we will reap
Maybe our eyes, longing and dire
A gateway to our soul, our own inner fire
They show us the way, allowing us peace
And sometimes deceive us, showing a beast
Maybe our love, spoken today
Is guiding our future, showing the way
It helps us live on, when day turns to night
It helps us forgive, each little fight
Our children will go, and live on tomorrow
So swallow our pride, tell of our sorrow
I see pain inside you, a deep wounding scar
Unhealed and unheard, it’s followed thus far
It won’t go away, not on its own
You’re heart is its place, its own little home
Don’t let it control you, you are its boss
Allow me to take it, and help bear you’re cross
Maybe you’re fond, of hearing me say
How dear I love you, in each little way
I wish I could help you, relinquish you’re fear
Cause the love that we have, I hold it dear
Maybe it’s you, that’s showed me the way
And helped me find light, in every day
You saved my life dear, your love as it would
And you’ve helped me to see, all that is good
Maybe it’s me, holding you close
Through every day, the love is a rose
It hurt only one way, deep down in my heart
Maybe, some day, we won’t be apart
<!--QuoteEnd--></td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'><!--QuoteEEnd-->
"Hey baby, I got a minute. Wanna get lucky?"
Try it. <!--QuoteEnd--> </td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'> <!--QuoteEEnd-->
I am pretty curious, how you want to make "a human beeing of female gender" <!--emo&;)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/wink-fix.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='wink-fix.gif' /><!--endemo--> happy in only 1 minute.
I mean.....it usually takes whole 30 seconds to open the bra alone and 29 seconds to take care of the remaining clothing. What are you intending to do in the remaining second <!--emo&???--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/confused-fix.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='confused-fix.gif' /><!--endemo-->
Oh and you might want to express your feelings otherwise. Cut the whole thinking about it part and start talking witheout a day or two of preperation.
I mean.....it usually takes whole 30 seconds to open the bra alone and 29 seconds to take care of the remaining clothing. What are you intending to do in the remaining second <!--emo&???--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/confused-fix.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='confused-fix.gif' /><!--endemo-->
Oh and you might want to express your feelings otherwise. Cut the whole thinking about it part and start talking witheout a day or two of preperation. <!--QuoteEnd--> </td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'> <!--QuoteEEnd-->
Well you can feel free to replace "Minute" with "Moment" to be less specific and open a larger timeframe. Then again, when was the last time somebody said "Gimme a second" to anything, and they actually only took a second?
I mean.....it usually takes whole 30 seconds to open the bra alone and 29 seconds to take care of the remaining clothing. <!--QuoteEnd--></td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'><!--QuoteEEnd-->
You take a stopwatch to bed with you or something? I mean, I've heard of quick men, but...
[edited for on-topicness]To me, you sound WAY too desperate. You're 18 man. Since you're in love with a 17 year old, I'm guessing you're a senior in high school, which means that come next year, you 1) won't be in a relationship with her, or 2) will be in a long-distance + occasional meetings back home relationship. Option #1 is far more common. You sound way too needy (like, you got some stalker potential in that note, I think) for a high school romance. This line in particular blends romance and depression like I've never seen it before:
<!--QuoteBegin--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> </td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin-->If i had to choose between meeting you or God. I'd meet you because I could always meet God after death.<!--QuoteEnd--></td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'><!--QuoteEEnd-->
It's brilliant, but scary. If I were this girl, I'd be more likely to call a psychiatrist to take a look at you than to call you for a date. <!--emo&;)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/wink-fix.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='wink-fix.gif' /><!--endemo-->
Oh, and all you guys saying, "Poetry sucks, just grow some balls and ask her out," notice that the female replies to this thread have been more along the lines of, "This poem is more cliche/longwinded than emotional/touching." Conclusion: it's not WHAT you do, it's HOW you do it.
[edit2]I like the poem, Bullethead
quoted for truth
Going face to face requires some setting of the mood, reading the other person right to do so, and getting in the right ballpark with your body language and vocal tone - its sometimes really not that easy. I've used written notes, when the surrounding situation was a bit awkward - but more of a flirtatious (yes, contrary to popular belief I can be) nature.
Generally thats a good rule of thumb anyway. Loveletters are fine if you already have some kind of relationship - hell, enough infatuation and someone might even enjoy a bag of illegible tripe like the first post of this thread. Otherwise though, strike the same tone that you would verbally if you don't really have anything or have had going with them - light, humorous, ironic quips and subtle flattery (just avoid biting insults, genius) - the usual games you play to arouse some interest.
I mean duh, why does this **** need to be typed out? Have you people not talked to females before? Wait... nevermind.
He happens to be very good at treading water. He can only escape by climbing up the ladder. The pipe has a metal covering preventing him from climbing into it.
You have a lever in your hand. When you are not acting force upon the lever, no water is expelled. You can pull the lever to allow water to flow into the room. The harder you pull, the greater the force and volume of water will be expelled at once.
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You have the man's best interests at heart. He wants to escape the room. If you do not pull the lever, he will die from starvation. He can only tread water for a certain amount of time until he will drown.
The next picture is quite graphic, so I give you forewarning.
This is what you very well could have done:
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Now, compare this scenario to you and this girl. The water is your emotions. She is the man (haw haw) and you are the one with the lever in your hand. The ladder escape route is "happily ever after". <!--QuoteEnd--></td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'><!--QuoteEEnd-->
Am I the only one who gets it? <!--QuoteEnd--> </td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'> <!--QuoteEEnd-->
No it makes perfect sense to me. I guess the diagrams threw everyone else off? <!--emo&:p--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/tounge.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='tounge.gif' /><!--endemo-->
Cookiebooger, there's no point in all this planning and so on. If you can't do this naturally and casually, then it's going to cause you a lot of trouble.
But it's also easier for me to say things like that online through AIM and such, because we're *not* face to face - so there's that too.
I just don't care anymore, I'm moving on. She can ruin my heart but she can't ruin my life.
tldr
really. I read about every 5th word, and I think I got the gist of it. Man, I'm jaded. Love letters work on certain types of people, though. Hope whoever it was sent to was one of those types.
/isn't my type.
You realize I insulted you, yes?
2.) I got the diagram perfectly. You want to have the right force, but you give it too much, and all your hopes are shattered.
3.) Talking face to face with a girl requires a.) balls and b.) knowing the girl. For guys who are timid and shy and are better suited to writing out their feelings than speaking them, a poem is probably the best way.
Last but not least: I'm sorry for what happened, but i'm sure you'll find someone else. If you really think she's that one person, let her go, and if she comes back to you, she's yours forever. If she doesn't, then it was never meant to be.
Cliche FTW!
Saltz...you're mean. The guy came on asking for opinions on his letter, not opinions on whether it was a good idea. Lay off the guy.
And I think I have insulted you too. Nice try but I'm more intelligent than that.
Explains a lot...
And cookie, generally in order to classify as an "insult", the party that is supposed to be offended (and most everyone that is supposed to laugh at said offended party) should at the least have some comprehension of the nature of the insult.
In other words, what the crap did that mean?
Really nothing has changed.
Ether way your poetry lacks all of these things and goes one step above lacking by making it quite clear you will never possess any one of the above.