Our Bands First Song!
Byeka
Name changed from Freak83Toronto Join Date: 2003-03-13 Member: 14484Members, Constellation
<div class="IPBDescription">Thoughts/Feedback?</div>My friend and I just released our first song for our band - Hyper Two. The song is called Convergence and it's along the lines of instrumental rock.
YouTube / SoundCloud / Facebook links provided for however you prefer to listen. Would love to hear your thoughts and feedback on it! :D
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<a href="http://www.soundcloud.com/hypertwo/convergence" target="_blank">http://www.soundcloud.com/hypertwo/convergence</a>
<a href="http://www.facebook.com/HyperTwoMusic" target="_blank">http://www.facebook.com/HyperTwoMusic</a>
<b>EDIT/UPDATE: Our Second Song</b>
Hey guys, thanks again for all your feedback on the song! We took it into consideration with the release of our second song "<a href="http://soundcloud.com/hypertwo/hyper-two-a-forgotten-empire" target="_blank">A Forgotten Empire</a>". With the lack of vocals we tried to fill it up more with instruments and not make it as repetitive. Thoughts?
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YouTube / SoundCloud / Facebook links provided for however you prefer to listen. Would love to hear your thoughts and feedback on it! :D
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<a href="http://www.soundcloud.com/hypertwo/convergence" target="_blank">http://www.soundcloud.com/hypertwo/convergence</a>
<a href="http://www.facebook.com/HyperTwoMusic" target="_blank">http://www.facebook.com/HyperTwoMusic</a>
<b>EDIT/UPDATE: Our Second Song</b>
Hey guys, thanks again for all your feedback on the song! We took it into consideration with the release of our second song "<a href="http://soundcloud.com/hypertwo/hyper-two-a-forgotten-empire" target="_blank">A Forgotten Empire</a>". With the lack of vocals we tried to fill it up more with instruments and not make it as repetitive. Thoughts?
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Comments
Perfectly listenable, if a bit weak in the climax department
Gotta agree though it is an alright song to listen to.
Alternatively, there's an instrument missing in some parts of it. Or rather, it could do with another one. Something that either builds an additional melody on top of what you have, or harmonizes over the one that's already there.
Throwing in some bass guitar might also be a good idea. That may just be personal taste though.
Drums are maybe a bit too prominent and elaborate compared to the other instruments. Compare this song to something like NIN's "The Perfect Drug" (unfair, I know), which is a much more uptempo and, for lack of a better word, forceful song, and can therefore get away with a much more prominent drum beat.
All of this is from someone with no formal training and no musical experience except vocals, so take it with a pinch of salt.
The song actually was written without any intent for vocals although I agree that I'm sure vocals could be layered on top. You are however correct in that we do not have a vocalist. Neither my friend or I can sing very well, or are any good at writing lyrics which is why we try to write our songs just instrumentally.
I posted this same thread on another message board as well and the common theme among responses seems to be that it needs "a little bit more" in some way or another.
We are currently working on our next one and we'll be taking all your suggestions into account. We want to get as good as possible and then even better ;)
The next song does have bass as well :P
In the end, it is a good start. The hardest part is getting a group together and actually making the music. After that point, things start to roll into place. Keep up the work!
The thing that I think you could improve on is on the "refrain" that the song keeps coming back to. Basically the riff that the lead guitar keeps doing is.... REALLY repetitive. There's not really any meat to that part of the song, despite coming back to it several times.
I'd definitely listen to more.
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@ellnic - I'm not sure if we'll do that for Convergence, however we do have at least 3 other songs in the works that we plan to have vocals for. We just need to find someone to sing them and help with writing them.
@Align - I'm not sure I completely understand what you mean. Do you mean that it ends a little too quickly without any sort of final wrap up? From 3:35 onwards is what we had officially labelled as the "outro" in the sheet music. 2:30 is actually labelled as the pre-chorus / chorus even though it only plays once.
Thanks a shame, would really like to of heard that with a good song. Would be intrested to hear the others if and when you get someone to sing for you