My First Time
spinviper
Join Date: 2003-05-08 Member: 16151Members
Join Date: 2003-05-08 Member: 16151Members
Natural-Selection
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Counter-Attack
Outpost Alpha had been hit hard from the Kharra Infestation. We The Orbital Space Drop Troopers code-named ODST are being sent to reinforce the remaining defenders.
“Get ready to phase in!” I shouted. “Sir, yes Sir!” The rest of the squad returned. I was a Captain (named Zayl) in the Special Forces Orbital Space Drop Troopers. I had briefed them on the mission earlier, giving them a holographic projection of Outpost Alpha.
Everyone “Lock-n-loaded” removing the safeties of their weapons and loading fresh clips into them.
0300 hrs Marine outpost Alpha
Everyone had phased in. I relieved the original defenders of their duties and jumped in the command chair. I dropped an Armory, an Arms Lab and an observatory. My combat engineers immediately started building them. I released some mines from the armory and asked Pvt.Jenkins to place them around the infantry portals, arms lab, and observatory. I sent a Search and Destroy Group consisting of Corporal James, Private Jack, and Private Danyal to clear the Outpost of any remaining Kharra and give me a Damage assestment.
They returned an hour later suffering minor injures, they told me that the outpost’s defence and power systems were offline and that the power generator was damaged. They also told methat we should relocate to the outpost’s command room, where I could access all the outposts controls/functions. There was also a Command Chair already there. So I agreed.
Once I got there I recycled the old base. And I was surprised to see the amount of resources that came in it was around 200! So I ran a check to see how many resource towers the outpost had and if all the resource nodes had rts on them. I was amazed, all of the res nodes were capped which totaled to around ten! No wonder I had so much resources. I immediately rebuilt the original structures and also built a prototype lab. By this time I had already researched weapons level two and had begun research on jetpacks. I released a welder form the armory and asked a combat engineer named Zack to repair our Power Generator so that I could get the defence systems online.
“Power Generator back online” reported Zack “Roger that, hold your position I’ll drop a turret factory."I replied
Is it good so far??? if not i wont continue.......<!--emo&:(--><img src='http://www.natural-selection.org/forums/html/emoticons/sad.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='sad.gif'><!--endemo--> <!--emo&::nerdy::--><img src='http://www.natural-selection.org/forums/html/emoticons/nerd.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='nerd.gif'><!--endemo-->
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Counter-Attack
Outpost Alpha had been hit hard from the Kharra Infestation. We The Orbital Space Drop Troopers code-named ODST are being sent to reinforce the remaining defenders.
“Get ready to phase in!” I shouted. “Sir, yes Sir!” The rest of the squad returned. I was a Captain (named Zayl) in the Special Forces Orbital Space Drop Troopers. I had briefed them on the mission earlier, giving them a holographic projection of Outpost Alpha.
Everyone “Lock-n-loaded” removing the safeties of their weapons and loading fresh clips into them.
0300 hrs Marine outpost Alpha
Everyone had phased in. I relieved the original defenders of their duties and jumped in the command chair. I dropped an Armory, an Arms Lab and an observatory. My combat engineers immediately started building them. I released some mines from the armory and asked Pvt.Jenkins to place them around the infantry portals, arms lab, and observatory. I sent a Search and Destroy Group consisting of Corporal James, Private Jack, and Private Danyal to clear the Outpost of any remaining Kharra and give me a Damage assestment.
They returned an hour later suffering minor injures, they told me that the outpost’s defence and power systems were offline and that the power generator was damaged. They also told methat we should relocate to the outpost’s command room, where I could access all the outposts controls/functions. There was also a Command Chair already there. So I agreed.
Once I got there I recycled the old base. And I was surprised to see the amount of resources that came in it was around 200! So I ran a check to see how many resource towers the outpost had and if all the resource nodes had rts on them. I was amazed, all of the res nodes were capped which totaled to around ten! No wonder I had so much resources. I immediately rebuilt the original structures and also built a prototype lab. By this time I had already researched weapons level two and had begun research on jetpacks. I released a welder form the armory and asked a combat engineer named Zack to repair our Power Generator so that I could get the defence systems online.
“Power Generator back online” reported Zack “Roger that, hold your position I’ll drop a turret factory."I replied
Is it good so far??? if not i wont continue.......<!--emo&:(--><img src='http://www.natural-selection.org/forums/html/emoticons/sad.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='sad.gif'><!--endemo--> <!--emo&::nerdy::--><img src='http://www.natural-selection.org/forums/html/emoticons/nerd.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='nerd.gif'><!--endemo-->
Comments
Its good, has some promise <!--emo&:)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/smile.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='smile.gif'><!--endemo--> Even so, don't stop, write it because <i>you</i> want to write it, not because you feel you have too. If someone says its not so great, good for them, so long as you had fun doing it keep it up. People giving complements is just a side part of the whole buisness <!--emo&;)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/wink.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='wink.gif'><!--endemo-->
Its good, just add a little more detail and you're set <!--emo&:)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/smile.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='smile.gif'><!--endemo-->
don't stop, write it because <i>you</i> want to write it, not because you feel you have too. <!--QuoteEnd--> </td></tr></table><span class='postcolor'> <!--QuoteEEnd-->
agreed
I like how the nodes are capped and everything is going smoothly
*dreams of a day when this will happen on a pub*
wha!? oh right...
good work <!--emo&:)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/smile.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='smile.gif'><!--endemo-->
Always continue! Never give up! Never surrender! We will fight on the beaches... we will fight on the lands... we will never surrender! NEVER!
Sorry...
<!--emo&::asrifle::--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/asrifle.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='asrifle.gif'><!--endemo--> <!--emo&::skulk::--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/skulk.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='skulk.gif'><!--endemo--> <--me bum, your shooting me bum
Always continue! Never give up! Never surrender! <!--QuoteEnd--> </td></tr></table><span class='postcolor'> <!--QuoteEEnd-->
By grabthars hammer, by the sun's of warvan, you will be avenged!
it hurts the eyes
however you fan-fic doesn't, it's actuallyquite pleasant =D
/me waits with Z.X