Unknown Enemy: Chapter 15

RobRob Unknown Enemy Join Date: 2002-01-24 Member: 25Members, NS1 Playtester
edited November 2002 in Fan-Fiction Forum
<div class="IPBDescription">Bast</div> I'm getting so close now...it's nearly finished. Here's the opener to Part III. Let me know what you think:

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  • NecroNecro &lt;insert non-birthday-related title here&gt; Join Date: 2002-08-09 Member: 1118Members
    rocks!!!!


    <!--QuoteBegin--></span><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> </td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin-->Wilcox breathed thoughtfully, "Well, we know things now that we didn't before. We know that each hive, like those you found on the Orion, enhances the enemy. We know that the aliens expand via a bacterial stream. We know that they are essentially fighting the exact same war that they've been fighting for millennia. And we know they are intelligent.<!--QuoteEnd--></td></tr></table><span class='postcolor'><!--QuoteEEnd-->

    best part imho <!--emo&:D--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/biggrin.gif' border='0' valign='absmiddle' alt='biggrin.gif'><!--endemo-->
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  • realityisdeadrealityisdead Employed by Raven Software after making ns_nothing Join Date: 2002-01-26 Member: 94Members, NS1 Playtester, Contributor
    Oh, you jerk, rob! Why'd you stop there?! Jerk jerk jerk jerk jerk!!

    I love it! <img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/style_images/1/icon6.gif' border='0' alt='user posted image'>

    I really don't have anything in specific to criticize here, and all comments I'd have regarding your general style have already been made elsewhere. <i>Really</i> looking forward to the next one.
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  • RobRob Unknown Enemy Join Date: 2002-01-24 Member: 25Members, NS1 Playtester
    Thanks guys!
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  • Llama_KillerLlama_Killer Join Date: 2002-07-30 Member: 1029Members
    rob6264 = pwn

    Great work!
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  • GuardianGuardian Join Date: 2002-11-01 Member: 2335Members
    Mad props from the n00b (me). Just spent a good portion of my Saturday reading everything I could get my hands on. It was pretty cool how you started to incorporate more things from the game as the novel prograssed. Like having O'neill designing the HMG, and making Hera and Bast operation points. I was like "Yea watch those vents..."

    Good job man.
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  • RobRob Unknown Enemy Join Date: 2002-01-24 Member: 25Members, NS1 Playtester
    Thanks guys!
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  • WindelkronWindelkron Join Date: 2002-04-11 Member: 419Members
    I like the last line.
    <!--QuoteBegin--></span><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> </td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin-->"Ah, hell," Heckler sighed.<!--QuoteEnd--></td></tr></table><span class='postcolor'><!--QuoteEEnd-->
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  • MuntyMunty Join Date: 2002-11-01 Member: 2972Members, Constellation
    edited November 2002
    Iv'e only just started reading this fan-fiction, and so far its really cool.
    But, mostly during the first few chapters, I've noticed several gramatical errors..
    e.g. lye instead of lay...
    I probably didn't notice all of em, but they are there <!--emo&???--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/confused.gif' border='0' valign='absmiddle' alt='confused.gif'><!--endemo--> caused by a dang spell checker I bet <!--emo&:p--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/tounge.gif' border='0' valign='absmiddle' alt='tounge.gif'><!--endemo-->
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  • RobRob Unknown Enemy Join Date: 2002-01-24 Member: 25Members, NS1 Playtester
    Thanks all.

    Yeah there's alot of crap in the beginning chapters that needs its guts ripped out and reassembled...
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  • SilverHorseSilverHorse Join Date: 2002-11-12 Member: 8291Members
    Is it just me or is it down now?

    (send the html file to me, i'll mirror it on my site if you want me to <!--emo&:)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/smile.gif' border='0' valign='absmiddle' alt='smile.gif'><!--endemo-->)
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  • BiTMAPBiTMAP Join Date: 2002-11-08 Member: 7685Members
    i'd LOVe to see it in a white on black version so i could print it (easier to read) and having next page type things at the bottom... I see in in my head in terminal size 1 with bold titles in black on eeeeee coloured backround.
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  • bobthemagicalfishbobthemagicalfish Join Date: 2002-11-03 Member: 6007Members
    the entire hive page is out as seen on my computer say page cant be display so i can read your cool *beep* stroy
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  • RobRob Unknown Enemy Join Date: 2002-01-24 Member: 25Members, NS1 Playtester
    The whole of RR.org is down.

    And I don't see MonsE having time to fix it very soon...I'm gonna have to flop it all over to my WW site sooner than I wanted to.
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  • CyborgguineapigCyborgguineapig Join Date: 2002-11-01 Member: 3233Members
    Have you published any books? This is great!
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  • SilverHorseSilverHorse Join Date: 2002-11-12 Member: 8291Members
    EXCELLENT writing.

    A+ <!--emo&:)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/smile.gif' border='0' valign='absmiddle' alt='smile.gif'><!--endemo-->

    (write more!)
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  • RobRob Unknown Enemy Join Date: 2002-01-24 Member: 25Members, NS1 Playtester
    Thanks guys.
    This is the first story I've kept up with. I've started others, but then crapped out after a few chapters. I think UE's success is mostly due to the chapter by chapter release, each new release giving me feedback and encouragement.
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  • Kung_FoolKung_Fool Join Date: 2002-11-02 Member: 4092Members
    Dude without any exaggeration, that truly is a great piece of art you have there. Battle on! <!--emo&:)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/smile.gif' border='0' valign='absmiddle' alt='smile.gif'><!--endemo-->
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