Unknown enemy: the sector 12 conflict
Rob
Unknown Enemy Join Date: 2002-01-24 Member: 25Members, NS1 Playtester
<div class="IPBDescription">One more trip back down memory lane</div>I'm utterly pleased to present, in cooperation with Tzarcon, the complete, two part story of the Sector 12 Conflict. This is where Wilcox got the name "Romeo."
<a href="http://members.fortunecity.com/rob6264" target="_blank">Read it here</a>
Whatcha think?
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<a href="http://members.fortunecity.com/rob6264" target="_blank">Read it here</a>
Whatcha think?
<!--EDIT|rob6264|April 14 2002,16:25-->
Comments
But, try and draw some of the parts out. Like when they're sniping that VIP... And also, as Highlander said, maybe add the name Romeo in more. Other than that... Jeez, that's good.
<!--EDIT|Spyder Monkey|April 16 2002,07:33-->
Hellocke, thanks for the comments. I see where you're coming from, but I don't like to change previous chapters. That said, I will do my best to take your suggestions into account when writing Chapter 7, which is what's coming next.
I love constructive critisim, and that's a good example of it, thanks again.
edit** Bah, 2 seconds too late, why does this always happen to me?
<!--EDIT|Spyder Monkey|April 16 2002,07:35-->
So, yeah, this was good. I really, really liked the bit near the end where <span style='color:222222'>Warren made his emotional, inspiring speech</span>.
Give us Chapter 7 soon.
I'll have to talk to you about some character stuff though