What Do [b] You [/b] Want In A Fan Fic?

That_Annoying_Kid

<div class="IPBDescription">'cause I'm bout to write some</div> I'm considering writing some NS fan fic, and I'm wondering what you forumites look for, action, suspense, deep plot, getting a glimpse into who/what the kaharra are... and I'm considering putting little pokes at NS in there, but I think that it might detract from the story I.E. "the fade charged charlie, he let let his shotgun loose it's furry upon the fearsome beast, it screamed in pain, suddenly he heard a humming sound, and the fade was gone in a puff of blue... Charlie spun around looking frantically, he laughed when he saw a pair of alien legs and part of a torso thrashing around, the upper part of the fades body concealed by a wall..." just little pieces of satire like that. give me some ideas, I know that it's going to be set on : bast, tanith, or hera (which one should it be?) and it's going to involved the marines coming in thinking it's nothing, and then having to figure out how to tech up to stave off the kaharaa which HQ said weren't anywhere near the area...
so, a penny for your thoughts!
(and if you put your two cents in, where does th@ other penny go?)

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spelling/grammar checks are you friend, and now I know that tags don't work in topic titles, but you get the generall idea
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DizzyOne

Maybe this isnt what u want to hear...

...but use spaces and paragraphes becuz my eyes cant handle too much sentences sticked together (its more relaxing that way).

For the story I would say use ur imagination, I would love to read some humor <!--emo&:)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/smile.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='smile.gif'><!--endemo-->

eediot

paragraphs, spacing, keep it action packed, but not a recount of what happened in a game of NS that you had today.

spellcheck it, and proof read it a few times

i know i didnt, but im a fairly good speller, and any problems i had were with typos i didnt see.

really its all just a case of 'put in some butter, not too little, not too much'

youll have to be the judge of it when youre writing it, and let the readers be the judge of it when you hand it out.

i got a fairly good response, so im going to touch it up a tiny bit, then have a go at writing the next part of it.

That_Annoying_Kid

werks for me, expect the story to be up in a few weeks

SilentMurderer

One thing... Don't make the same mistake i use to do. Action action action action action action ac........

You get the point..

That_Annoying_Kid

so I shouldn't have to much leading up to fights?
not to decriptive, but not to gory eh?

xect

Well, I prefer a troughout story. Too many people make the mistake of descriping battles half the time. In the long run, reading "the fade killed the marine, the marin blasted the fade, another marine blasted another fade, an onos came, but was blasted, the skulk killed the marine, the marine killed two skulks, the skulks killed each other, the marines shot wildly around, the lerk spiked a marine, the marine shot the lerk" all over isnt action, it's just dull.

Simply put, you have to remember that battle and action is too different things. Just describing battle does not mean action, remember to have some punch behind the battle, like characters we actually know and something new in the battles.

And another thing, watch those alien numbers. Pulling forth an example, the official fiction rarely describes more than one alien at a time. First chapter of Sanji has one alien, and few of the eye-witnesses in the manual speak about more than one alien at a time. A fierce or interesting battle with one alien (be that onos or skulk) is far more interesting than "marine kills skulk, marine kills another skulk, marine kills the third skulk"

Just my two cents, and remember that it's your fanfic after all <!--emo&;)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/wink.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='wink.gif'><!--endemo-->

That_Annoying_Kid

yes, very true...
I'm thinking of making a running sidestory that has an particular kaharaa who gets spared (in the main story)and the the "friendship" between him and his saving marine grow bigger. Gah, sprint bell ringing, must get to class

Bronski

Make the reader care about the characters. That way, if any of them die the reader will actually care.

That_Annoying_Kid

yeah, very true.
I'm thinking of adding "Easter eggs" like having a few of my main charecter be "charlie lioc" <!--emo&:p--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/tounge.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='tounge.gif'><!--endemo-->
and yeah, I plan to try and dev my chars as much as possible

Bronski

I really don't know how much time people take to develop their characters before they start writing the story but if they do it will make a differenece.

Give them a background. This can be also a lot of fun. Though, in short stories you may not need to make up a detailed background for the character (unless they will show up in multiple short stories).

That_Annoying_Kid

I'm thinking of making it a medium sized one chapter story, dealing with marines going into bast to save all the technology there, but the TSA hq has other things in mind....

Bronski

Sounds like it will be an "Aliens" (ie the movies and books) type story where by the end you have to wonder who is worse, the aliens or the humans. Those are always enjoyable.

That_Annoying_Kid

well of course our hero's are going to be good and noble, they just have to fight the unjust companies that want the TSA gone...and those pesky aliens that seem to like to munch on them

xect

Yeah, just dont overlook the "battle is not action" part of my post, actually that was the main point of my post.

That_Annoying_Kid

roger
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Lumberjack_Wannabe

I agree with everyone else. Action is important, just don't get carried away.

A background to the situation would be cool. A prelude is what I'm trying to get to.

That_Annoying_Kid

I'm typing it as I speak, and I'm taking all of this into consideration.

BadKarma

Horror ****! The NS universe is a horror writers playground! I'd do it myself if I could write. So come on, this game is scary stuff, aint that hard to be frightened.

That_Annoying_Kid

hmmmmm, I haven't thought about a horror aspect.

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