That Aweful Chuckle
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Join Date: 2002-11-05 Member: 7028Members
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<div class="IPBDescription">My first few atempt at fan fic</div> That Aweful Chuckle by Lets Go Fishing
Hi there my name is Let Go Fishing aka:LGF . I been playing Natural Selection since Beta 1 came out and i was greatly impressed by the amazing peice of work that Flaya and his team did. Any way this is my first few time writing FanFic and i already written 1 other which can be found at Fanfiction.net but dont worry i'll place the hyper link here
Go to Games than Find Half Life than look for The Title Half Life/Fishy
Or go to find and type Half life and find my name and story
That Aweful Chuckle
I always wanted adventure, but not the kind i'm going to get. I was brough up in a criminal family who imported and exported arms and weapons to illegial organisation. I was taught to hate the authoritys. My parents taught all the skills which i needed to survive in the arms trade. I started firing the CZU16A4 Light machine ever since i was three i never knew it would come in handy and save my life. I even held the TSA 3.15 rocket launcher when i was ten, than i almost blew the ammo box casue i point it backwards. But i never gave up on training with the weapons.
Somewhere......in the Yamova System
"Sigh, these TSA are go ****. They cant even detect something as large as the god damm rocket launcher on my ship." said Yuna
Yuna was doing her usual arms trades in the Ariadne Arm space station which she did every year for the big bucks even though the route was far. Her new Al b42 space craft with modified engines could fly ten times faster than the normal TSA military boarding craft.
"Yuna i'm detecting an incomming TSA T7 frigate." said the ships mother system.
"O.k dont out run them they cant scan cause i install the new scanner disruptter."
Yuna stop her ship and got in to standard TSA scanning procedure.
"This is the TSA Frigate Ohio, we're detecting illegial arms aboard your ship stand down or be prepared to be fire upon."
"HOW THE **** THEY DETECTED MY WEAPONS!"
"Yuna i'm scanned the TSA Frigate and i'm getting unusual readings from their ships."
"Whatever, mother lock all system doors and, make sure no marine enters the cargo storage, i'll prepare to ambush them.'
"Yes madam"
Yuna ran towards the docking doors and hid herself in a position of that she can ambush them. She got ready her CZU4a16 Light machine gun and prepared to fire upon the marines.
The docking doors starts to open and two marines enter the ship. One holding a scanner, the other with the standard Lmg. Yuna waited for another 4 more marines to enter before she prepared her gun.
"1 2 3 ARRRRRRR"
Yuna jumps and prepares to fire the Marines, but just than she felt a hit in her back and blacked out.
"So commander what do we do with this ****? she's beatiful i think she's only 20."
"Well monkey just throw her in the prison we'll deal with her later, first search the ship and transfer all it's cargo across."
"O.k no prob by the way nice judgement u made there."
"Thx"
Yuna finally recover and felt a sharp pain in her neck. She could tell she was behind bars. She looked around her suroundings and quickly ran for the port hole. She saw her customise ship moving further away from where she was.
Yuna ran to the laser bar and shouted at the guard.
"Hey you come here i want to share with you a secret."
"You are really sexy but dont push your luck that wont work on me."
Yuna started stripping in front of the guard until there was nothing left on her.
"Now thats what i call a ****, come to pap..."
*A siren started wailing*
"Pirvate monkey report to the main deck IMEDIATELY! The rest of you move out NOW!"
"I gotta go i'll finger you later."
Monkey started walking to the door and open it. Just when he open it a miniture dog flew into the room and started bitting Monkey.
"Arrrrrrrr, HELP HELP ME!" Scream monkey as he whack the button for the laser bar.
Yuna spring into action as she tried to grab the dog, but by than monkey had already stop screaming. Yuna quickly grab the LMG and fire all around. Suddently the dog jumped on to her face and she had to hold it off with the hands which. The Dog got it's claws and tried to scratch the Yuna's face but she kick the dogs butt and started firing the corner it landed.
"What the **** was that." Yuna said with fear in her voice.
Yuna ran though the now dead Private Monkey and grab his pistol and extra ammo. She than walk over to the dog and examine it. It didnt look like any creature she saw before. She saw many other alien which can attack but not one with this speed and agility. Yuna looked at it's teeth and was totally shocked. It had teeth as long as her fingers and it was really sharp.
Yuna got up and wondered what was that. She reloaded the gun and opened the door. The corridoor was empty and it had a fog of mist making it errie.
Meanwhile.........
"Commander, Monkey hasnt report yet, do you think one of those things got him?"
"I'm not sure, the short cut by the lift is cut off thanks to the power surge."
"So you think he ran into those things? i hope he doesnt meet one of those three ton freak or he's in big trouble."
"Yeah i suggest you scan the area to find out where he is."
"O.k i'll scan the route he might take."
Back to Yuna......
Yuna started moving down the hallway and keep his eye peeled. She could hear some soft screams and muffled gun fire. Suddently some blue scanner waves started appearing and she started jumping for cover so that she was not discovered. She had to get out of this ship or she'll be losing some big bucks. Just than the above announcement system flicked to life.
"Repeat this is The Ohio Ship Comamnder, you are to stand down imediately or be prepared to be neutralise."
"Yea right."
"I mean it."
A Medpack suddently appeared in the air and fell to the ground! Yuna never saw anything like that ad was shocked.
"WoW THATS AMAZING HOW DO YOU DO THAT!"
"Just follow my orders and you'll be released, and by the way your shipment of weaponary it super cool."
"Thanks"
"O.k now whats your name Lady?"
"Yuna"
"O.k Yuna i want you to follow my directions, o.k move straight all the way to the end of this corridoor and than turn right."
"O.k but cant i just use the elevator?"
"It's jamm"
"O maybe i can fix it?"
"You know how to restore power to 0.357 type elevator?"
"I know mechanics."
"O.k go and find out whats wrong with the elevator if you need anything ask me."
Yuna started walking to the elevator and started looking at it's power sector. She started fixing up some wiring when she heard a ROAR.
"What was that!" Shouted Yuna
"Yuna get the **** out of there something big is comming your way."
Yuna got up and was about to move out when she suddently couldnt move. She could only stay in that position.
"YUNA GET OUT OF THERE!"
"I CANT MOVE DAMM IT"
Suddenlty something came out of the mist, a large big freak was just standing a few feet away from her. The Big animal started rushing towards her but she just couldnt move. The thing was comming closer to her and she just stood there like and idiot.
Just when the animal was about the ram into her suddently she was grabbed by something and flew in to the air. Than she was let go of and someone started firing his gun at the large ****. The thing turn around and tried to ram the marine who saved her but the HMG he has is pushing back the thing back and into the corner until finally the creature fell and stopped breathing. The flying marine quickly grab Yuna and lifted her up the elevator.
"Who are you?"
"No time to waste follow me."
Yuna followed the marine though the confusing corridoor till they finally arrived at a makeshfit base.
Pls review
Hi there my name is Let Go Fishing aka:LGF . I been playing Natural Selection since Beta 1 came out and i was greatly impressed by the amazing peice of work that Flaya and his team did. Any way this is my first few time writing FanFic and i already written 1 other which can be found at Fanfiction.net but dont worry i'll place the hyper link here
Go to Games than Find Half Life than look for The Title Half Life/Fishy
Or go to find and type Half life and find my name and story
That Aweful Chuckle
I always wanted adventure, but not the kind i'm going to get. I was brough up in a criminal family who imported and exported arms and weapons to illegial organisation. I was taught to hate the authoritys. My parents taught all the skills which i needed to survive in the arms trade. I started firing the CZU16A4 Light machine ever since i was three i never knew it would come in handy and save my life. I even held the TSA 3.15 rocket launcher when i was ten, than i almost blew the ammo box casue i point it backwards. But i never gave up on training with the weapons.
Somewhere......in the Yamova System
"Sigh, these TSA are go ****. They cant even detect something as large as the god damm rocket launcher on my ship." said Yuna
Yuna was doing her usual arms trades in the Ariadne Arm space station which she did every year for the big bucks even though the route was far. Her new Al b42 space craft with modified engines could fly ten times faster than the normal TSA military boarding craft.
"Yuna i'm detecting an incomming TSA T7 frigate." said the ships mother system.
"O.k dont out run them they cant scan cause i install the new scanner disruptter."
Yuna stop her ship and got in to standard TSA scanning procedure.
"This is the TSA Frigate Ohio, we're detecting illegial arms aboard your ship stand down or be prepared to be fire upon."
"HOW THE **** THEY DETECTED MY WEAPONS!"
"Yuna i'm scanned the TSA Frigate and i'm getting unusual readings from their ships."
"Whatever, mother lock all system doors and, make sure no marine enters the cargo storage, i'll prepare to ambush them.'
"Yes madam"
Yuna ran towards the docking doors and hid herself in a position of that she can ambush them. She got ready her CZU4a16 Light machine gun and prepared to fire upon the marines.
The docking doors starts to open and two marines enter the ship. One holding a scanner, the other with the standard Lmg. Yuna waited for another 4 more marines to enter before she prepared her gun.
"1 2 3 ARRRRRRR"
Yuna jumps and prepares to fire the Marines, but just than she felt a hit in her back and blacked out.
"So commander what do we do with this ****? she's beatiful i think she's only 20."
"Well monkey just throw her in the prison we'll deal with her later, first search the ship and transfer all it's cargo across."
"O.k no prob by the way nice judgement u made there."
"Thx"
Yuna finally recover and felt a sharp pain in her neck. She could tell she was behind bars. She looked around her suroundings and quickly ran for the port hole. She saw her customise ship moving further away from where she was.
Yuna ran to the laser bar and shouted at the guard.
"Hey you come here i want to share with you a secret."
"You are really sexy but dont push your luck that wont work on me."
Yuna started stripping in front of the guard until there was nothing left on her.
"Now thats what i call a ****, come to pap..."
*A siren started wailing*
"Pirvate monkey report to the main deck IMEDIATELY! The rest of you move out NOW!"
"I gotta go i'll finger you later."
Monkey started walking to the door and open it. Just when he open it a miniture dog flew into the room and started bitting Monkey.
"Arrrrrrrr, HELP HELP ME!" Scream monkey as he whack the button for the laser bar.
Yuna spring into action as she tried to grab the dog, but by than monkey had already stop screaming. Yuna quickly grab the LMG and fire all around. Suddently the dog jumped on to her face and she had to hold it off with the hands which. The Dog got it's claws and tried to scratch the Yuna's face but she kick the dogs butt and started firing the corner it landed.
"What the **** was that." Yuna said with fear in her voice.
Yuna ran though the now dead Private Monkey and grab his pistol and extra ammo. She than walk over to the dog and examine it. It didnt look like any creature she saw before. She saw many other alien which can attack but not one with this speed and agility. Yuna looked at it's teeth and was totally shocked. It had teeth as long as her fingers and it was really sharp.
Yuna got up and wondered what was that. She reloaded the gun and opened the door. The corridoor was empty and it had a fog of mist making it errie.
Meanwhile.........
"Commander, Monkey hasnt report yet, do you think one of those things got him?"
"I'm not sure, the short cut by the lift is cut off thanks to the power surge."
"So you think he ran into those things? i hope he doesnt meet one of those three ton freak or he's in big trouble."
"Yeah i suggest you scan the area to find out where he is."
"O.k i'll scan the route he might take."
Back to Yuna......
Yuna started moving down the hallway and keep his eye peeled. She could hear some soft screams and muffled gun fire. Suddently some blue scanner waves started appearing and she started jumping for cover so that she was not discovered. She had to get out of this ship or she'll be losing some big bucks. Just than the above announcement system flicked to life.
"Repeat this is The Ohio Ship Comamnder, you are to stand down imediately or be prepared to be neutralise."
"Yea right."
"I mean it."
A Medpack suddently appeared in the air and fell to the ground! Yuna never saw anything like that ad was shocked.
"WoW THATS AMAZING HOW DO YOU DO THAT!"
"Just follow my orders and you'll be released, and by the way your shipment of weaponary it super cool."
"Thanks"
"O.k now whats your name Lady?"
"Yuna"
"O.k Yuna i want you to follow my directions, o.k move straight all the way to the end of this corridoor and than turn right."
"O.k but cant i just use the elevator?"
"It's jamm"
"O maybe i can fix it?"
"You know how to restore power to 0.357 type elevator?"
"I know mechanics."
"O.k go and find out whats wrong with the elevator if you need anything ask me."
Yuna started walking to the elevator and started looking at it's power sector. She started fixing up some wiring when she heard a ROAR.
"What was that!" Shouted Yuna
"Yuna get the **** out of there something big is comming your way."
Yuna got up and was about to move out when she suddently couldnt move. She could only stay in that position.
"YUNA GET OUT OF THERE!"
"I CANT MOVE DAMM IT"
Suddenlty something came out of the mist, a large big freak was just standing a few feet away from her. The Big animal started rushing towards her but she just couldnt move. The thing was comming closer to her and she just stood there like and idiot.
Just when the animal was about the ram into her suddently she was grabbed by something and flew in to the air. Than she was let go of and someone started firing his gun at the large ****. The thing turn around and tried to ram the marine who saved her but the HMG he has is pushing back the thing back and into the corner until finally the creature fell and stopped breathing. The flying marine quickly grab Yuna and lifted her up the elevator.
"Who are you?"
"No time to waste follow me."
Yuna followed the marine though the confusing corridoor till they finally arrived at a makeshfit base.
Pls review
Comments
as usuall check the spelling, grammar, sentence structure etc.
It always helps to re-read something after you post it, becuase then you can spot more of your errors.
I can't wait for the next chapter
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shouldn't be that big...
you weren't exactly clear on th@...
if I'm wrong, restate your ? again
I would reccommend not using 'CZU16A4 Light machine gun' everytime when the character's use the weapon. It catches the reader up and slows them down. Just refer to it as the LMG and only use the full 'CZU16A4 Light machine gun' only when it is necessary. You actually don't really need to use it at all. You could just have the character say, 'I learned to fire a machine gun when i was three.....' It does the same thing as what you have already written but it flows better and still establishes that the character grew up around weapons and knows how to use them.
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