Extermination

spinviper

<div class="IPBDescription">I'll give u this b4 my continuation :)</div> *THUD THUD THUD* The sound of a Fade coming was evident. It all started when we recieved a strange cargo shipment, it had some kind of animal in it. We had no idea it was a Kharra gorge before it was to late. The iron bars keeping it captive were melted of by some kind of acid, traces of Kharra bacterium was evident. The captain of the ship immeadiatly called the TSA but by that time the infestation had spread throughout the ship. When the TSA arrived they were slaughtered, fades shooting acid rockets, lerks with their spikes and skulks ripping apart their bodies.



I closed the airlock in the command room and started the self-destruct sequence, 5.00 minutes. The Red warning light flashed on and the computer said : Five minutes to Self-Destruct, all personell evacuate ship immediatly! The fade had started melting the Titanium A Reinforced doors with its acid, I had to escape!

I ran towards the LifePod bays carrying a CZU Lightmachine gun i had picked up from a dead marine. Adrenaline was pumping through my veins, I ran like there was no tommorrow. My mucccels were burning from the strain, I sucked up the pain and carried on running. I reached the LifePod bay and got into a lifepod. SAFETY! I quickly shut the pod doors, and pushed the release button. As my pod jettisoned, I had a shiver go down my spine. I did not know what it quite was at the moment. Maybe it was the humidy in the pod, but how could it be this hot in the deep, vast fringes of space? It hit me then. I gripped my weapon tighter. The humid air traveled down my spine every moment, releasing the intoxicating stench of black. I turned around suddenly, spraying a couple of rounds at the unknown before me. It was too late. The creature had ripped through my arm. I then felt a nice breeze of cool, fresh air. I fell, sinking into oblivion...

Bogglesteinsky

poor guy <!--emo&:(--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/sad.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='sad.gif'><!--endemo-->

thumbs up

Lumberjack_Wannabe

It's good, but there are a few grammatical errors here and there. I thought the story went by too fast. Maybe if you take time to build up the fact that the skulk was in the same pod as the guy, it would be even better. For example (this is the last parapgraph, as the man enters the pod):

SAFETY! I quickly shut the pod doors, and pushed the release button. As my pod jettisoned, I had a shiver go down my spine. I did not know what it quite was at the moment. Maybe it was the humidy in the pod, but how could it be this hot in the deep, vast fringes of space? It hit me then. I gripped my weapon tighter. The humid air traveled down my spine every moment, releasing the intoxicating stench of black. I turned around suddenly, spraying a couple of rounds at the unknown before me. It was too late. The creature had ripped through my arm. I then felt a nice breeze of cool, fresh air. I fell, sinking into oblivion...

More would be great.

Bogglesteinsky

now thats an ending.

you'd do good to listen to this guy

That_Annoying_Kid

agreed

and how does a claw dislogde in his chest?


it's a quickie but a goodie

Lumberjack_Wannabe

<!--QuoteBegin--That Annoying Kid+Jun 20 2003, 07:39 PM--></span><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> (That Annoying Kid @ Jun 20 2003, 07:39 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin-->
and how does a claw dislogde in his chest?

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He meant that the claw left his chest after cutting into it. Equals death.

That_Annoying_Kid

well yeahh

I got that the claw broke of inside his chest, oh well