Spacecolony Leemdobben Part1

JezpuhJezpuh Join Date: 2003-04-03 Member: 15157Banned
edited August 2003 in Fan-Fiction Forum
<div class="IPBDescription">Pre-strory</div> This is my 1st fan fic so take it easy.
This is the pre-story.


May 11, 2104

7.08 AM

It was just another day at Leemdobben Spacecolony.
It was night, the whole station was in deep sleep.
Marc woke up. In about an hour the horns would sound and he'd had to go to work.
He worked on the food import section. Nothing really happend there.
"Today", Marc thought, "Today I'm gonna ask my chef for promotion."
"It's time that **** would respect me some more."
He stept out of bed. Walked to his window wich had a nice view in space.
He stood there for a few minutes, enjoying the view.
Then walked to his bathroom and dressed up. After that he walked to his chair to read the newspaper.

7.49 AM

Marc was on his way to his work. A woman with childeren walks past him.
He greets them, they greet back. "I love all the nice people here", he thought, "With my chef as an exception ofcourse."
"I don't even know why I'm going to ask, I always get refused..."
Then a colleague walked up to him.
"Have you heared what they imported at the military section?", the colleague asked. "No", Marc said. "What?".
"Some sort of pink egg, I don't know how they got it, but I think it's some sort of alien." he answered.
"An alien?", Marc asked. "Yes, maybe they want use it for the weapon industry, using his blood or something else.", the colleague said,
"Or maybe they want to let him make a base to observer him." "Tell me more on the work, we gotta run, else we're late."

8.02 PM

Marc's day was up, before he went to his room, he wanted to ask his chef about his promotion.
He walked to east acces corridor 2, showed his pass and the door opened.
He walked furter inside to blue lighted corridor.
He took a left and then the 2nd door on the right.
He knocked on the door.
"Who is there?", the chef asked.
"Marc, can I come in?"
"Sure Ma... What the? What the heck is that?!", the chef yelled.
"Uhm, sir, what's going on in there?", Marc asked.
"What the fu** is that thing? Get away from me!", Marc heared.
He heared a weird sound, some sort of chuckle.
Then he heared another weird sound, a kind of attacking sound.
"Sir, whats going on in there?!", Marc asked again.
He heared a scream, then followed by another chuckle and then it was quiet.
"What was that sir? Open up! Sir? Open the door! Sir?", Marc yelled.
A colleague came around the corner, he was running, it looked like he was in panic.
"Marc?!, what are you doing here, we need to evacuate, why are you still here?!" the colleague asked.
"Why, whats going? Something happend with the chef, you are running. Could somebody tell me whats going on?", Marc said.
"Ok, that pink alien egg that was imported today at the military section? It came out, and some scary little alien came out." the colleague said.
"It made a kind of nest and layed more eggs. Wich came out too, now they escaped! Everyone on the military section is dead!", he said.
"Come, follow me to the escape pod.", the colleague said.
Then they runned away.


8.12 PM

They walked through the station, passing crying kids who lost their mother, wounded or even dead people.
It was terrible, everyone tried to escape.
They reached the Escape Pods, but lots of people blocked their way.
Then Marc heared a scream, not a human scream, but a loud, long, angry scream.
Everyone was quiet for a moment, then more screams followed.
People started screaming, Marc heared multiple charching sounds.
"What heck is that?", he asked Paul, his colleague, "One of those aliens?"
"Paul?" Marc looked behind him, just to see how a two meter long alien pulled down his colleague and dragged him over the floor.
"Paul?!" "Paul!", Marc screamed. There was no time to save him, cause as soon as Marc tried to run to Paul and save him, little doglike aliens
jumped of the ceiling. He saw multiple people getting strucked down. He made a run for the escape pod.
Everywhere where he looked he saw people in panic, he heared lots of alien sounds.
Only a few more meters and he reached the escape pod. But then another 2 feeds alien blocked his way.
Marc dind't move a muscle, he looked into the aliens eye. The alien looked back angry.
It was about to attack, untill a dumb fat lady with her eyes closed runned into the alien.
She looked up and screamed. The alien lifted his claw up in the air.
Then, it smacked his claw with high speed into the womans skull. She was dead.
The alien dind't pay attention to Marc anymore. Marc ran away.
Just when he was about to enter the escape pod, the door closed. Marc banged onto the door window.
"Open up! Let me in, there are people here!"
The pod slowly made a ride backwards to a door. The door opened and the pod drived furter.
The door closed and the pod got launched.
Marc looked around, all pods left, but there were still people in here.
Most were dead. But a couple were still alive. Marc left the escape pod room.
Running into a dark corridor. I was quiet in here.
Marc slowly walked furter.
"What the hell should I do now? What the hell should I do know?!", he thought.
Almost at the end of the corridor he heared a chuckle.
"Oh no", he thought.
The steps came closer. Marc looked around.
No sign of an alien. But the steps still became louder.
When the steps were about 1 meter away from him, it stopped.
It was quiet for a second. Then, above him, in the dark, a doglike alien leaped forward to him.
The alien landed on Marc's legs, putting his teeths in Marcs leg. Marc screamed loud.
The alien was very strong and kept pulling Marc's leg, blood was everywhere.
It's teeth were deep inside his leg. Marc scream so loud, his echo came back 10 times.
And then, CHOP, Marc feeled an incredible rush of pain comming from his leg and going trough his body.


8.23 PM

Marc layed on the floor, the floor was covered with blood.
The pain at his leg was incredible.
He tried to look at his leg, but only saw his upper leg.
The doglike alien bit his leg off.
Marc crawled over the floor, leaving a track of blood.
He felt dizzy, he could pass out any moment.
He crawled furter untill he couldn't go furter.
He was laying there, waiting for his death.
He heared people screaming, aliens chomping and leaping.
Guns fire and childeren crieing.
He also heared big foot steps comming closer.
They stopped, a big shadow dropped over Marc.
He looked up and saw a giant alien.
"This is it..."




*prlly full of typos*

Comments

  • erendorerendor Join Date: 2003-02-06 Member: 13180Members
    scary stuff. But maybe you are copying alien just a little bit with the whole egg and weapons research and more eggs and stuff idea? probably not but be careful of that. Although, instead of the time thing above each art you could maybe have him checking his watch or seeing a clock? More atmospheric.

    Oh, yeah, other than those little issues, i loved it. Don't let him die!
  • That_Annoying_KidThat_Annoying_Kid Sire of Titles Join Date: 2003-03-01 Member: 14175Members, Constellation
    hives are a nice place for aliens to reproduce


    I like the format of the story with the timestamps to give us some indication as to how the day progesses

    if this is the intro to the story then I guess that the main character isn't going to be him...

    keep up the work
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