Ns_veil back story
KungFuSquirrel
Basher of Muttons Join Date: 2002-01-26 Member: 103Members, NS1 Playtester, Contributor
<div class="IPBDescription">Yay for stories!</div><a href="http://www.planethalflife.com/awmaps/ns_veil_story.txt" target="_blank">http://www.planethalflife.com/awmaps/ns_veil_story.txt</a>
I'm sure a few terms are wrong, a few details misaligned, etc... And I don't even know if Relic25 will agree to my use of the Bast in the story... but I just started writing and this is what I ended up with. Lemme know if you think I should change/correct anything, and I'll remove all references to Bast if it doesn't fit in at all. Which it probably doesn't.
(this is also posted on NS World now, for the record)
I'm sure a few terms are wrong, a few details misaligned, etc... And I don't even know if Relic25 will agree to my use of the Bast in the story... but I just started writing and this is what I ended up with. Lemme know if you think I should change/correct anything, and I'll remove all references to Bast if it doesn't fit in at all. Which it probably doesn't.
(this is also posted on NS World now, for the record)
Comments
Great story!
You're description of the establishment of the colony makes it sound small, yet when the aliens arrive they've got over 40 militia to send after them, that strikes me as a little odd.
For some reason I didn't imagine Bast being the type of ship that ever lands. However I did like the way you wrote it in. I can imagine backstories like this describing the progression of the infestation through human space, one map after another.
Can't wait to see this map.
Also, as far as the numbers... I'm going with a total of somewhere around 200-300 personnel (mining crews, security force, command station, then take into account the food processing facility). You need a lot of people to run frontier outposts! <!--emo&:D--><img src="http://www.natural-selection.org/iB_html/non-cgi/emoticons/biggrin.gif" border="0" valign="absmiddle" alt=':D'><!--endemo--> Again, this is just an early run through of the story, it'll probably be tidied up before the map is done.
here's a full layout diagram... I'll link to it since it's 1280x1024...
<a href="http://www.planethalflife.com/awmaps/pics/ns_veil_full_layout2.jpg" target="_blank">http://www.planethalflife.com/awmaps/pics/ns_veil_full_layout2.jpg</a>
And here's a top-down view of the WC grid, so you can compare how lined up the sketch and the current map are. There will be changes, of course, but for now this will do.
<img src="http://www.planethalflife.com/awmaps/pics/veil_topdown2.jpg" border="0">
Enjoy. <!--emo&:D--><img src="http://www.natural-selection.org/iB_html/non-cgi/emoticons/biggrin.gif" border="0" valign="absmiddle" alt=':D'><!--endemo-->