Curse my short attenti-

HBNayr

<div class="IPBDescription">Oh, what's that?</div>I like to write, but when I write, I have an attention span shorter than a ferret with a sugar high surrounded by Christmas lights.

So, what do you think so far?  I wrote without proofreading, so don't think that I'm done.  It needs polishing.  Oh, and the next scene.  But if anyone here like my style, maybe I'll continue on...

-Ryan!


"A critic is someone who never actually goes to the battle, yet who afterwards comes out shooting the wounded."
-- Tyne Daly

humbaba

cool introduction. I think it's worth writing more on. Keep going. Make sure to put a character in there that looves shotties. . . <!--emo&:D--><img src="http://www.natural-selection.org/iB_html/non-cgi/emoticons/biggrin.gif" border="0" valign="absmiddle" alt=':D'><!--endemo-->

Sgt_X

I hope you take the time to finsish it. I also hope that i take the time to fix the second part of my story and write the third part.