This is not only my first attempt at actually eirghting a story on a forum but my first public story...gimme the constructive critisim so I can do a bit better at the next chapter.
Jenkins stretched a rubbed the sleep from his eyes. He was a tall slender man with short cut brown hair, and dark blue eyes. He was also the Chief engineer aboard the U.S.S. Veringo. The ship was a good ten years old one of the older frieghter's still operating under the TSA's sub military....simply dubbed the "marines". He was taking his time this mourning. Despite her age she could still out pace most of the pirates that operated in those few "known" Anti-TSA sectors of space. He was heading for the mess hall to try and sneak some breakfast in when the comm implant in his hear gave a buzz. "Jenkins?" the voice on the other end spoke, it was one of his subordinates probably Treys "Yea I'm here. "I caught ya trying to sneak in that late breakfast." Jenkins frowned it wasn't one of his subordinates it was the ships security officers..Keila. "Yea what do ya want?" She replied in a rather teasing tone "my my, litte angry aren't we? Anyways they need you down in engineering some kinda problem with the number two engine." "What kinda problem can't be fixed by the idiots already down there?" she caught the mildly annoyed tone in his voice, and went with it. "Not a mechanical problem a Bio problem..." her voice trailed off as she got the answer she expected "Sheri you know I was never good with anything other then mechanical things.....Christ we've grown up together so you should know that better then anyone." "I know that" Sheri replied, but she continued before he could continue. "They still want you to take a look at it." Jenkins sighed. "tell um..." he waved his hand lazily. "Tell um I'll be down in five." She smiled "will do." the comm link cut and he headed towards the engine room. But for the first time in a very long time he got a very bad feeling in the pit of his stomache. a feeling of impending danger. he shruged it off; what was a little Space gum left by some unknown persons gonna ruin his day for.....still you never knew.
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"I caught ya trying to sneak in that late breakfast." Jenkins frowned it wasn't one of his subordinates it was the ships security officers..Keila. "Yea what do ya want?" She replied in a rather teasing tone "my my, litte angry aren't we? Anyways they need you down in engineering some kinda problem with the number two engine." "What kinda problem can't be fixed by the idiots already down there?" she caught the mildly annoyed tone in his voice, and went with it. "Not a mechanical problem a Bio problem..." her voice trailed off as she got the answer she expected "Sheri you know I was never good with anything other then mechanical things.....Christ we've grown up together so you should know that better then anyone." "I know that" Sheri replied, but she continued before he could continue. "They still want you to take a look at it." Jenkins sighed. "tell um..." he waved his hand lazily. "Tell um I'll be down in five."
She smiled "will do." the comm link cut and he headed towards the engine room. But for the first time in a very long time he got a very bad feeling in the pit of his stomache. a feeling of impending danger. he shruged it off; what was a little Space gum left by some unknown persons gonna ruin his day for.....still you never knew.