Monster - Part 19

DeepShadows

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zooby

Whoa...totally weird.

AWesome story.

Cold_NiTe

Great stuff. Keep it up!

DeepShadows

I tweaked a little bit just now, mainly the ending. I normally do that after reviewing chapters again but... I was annoyed with the tackiness of the ending enough to inform everyone of this. <!--emo&:D--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/biggrin.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='biggrin.gif'><!--endemo-->

Khaim

Good chapter, keep it up! <!--emo&:D--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/biggrin.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='biggrin.gif'><!--endemo-->

Parhelion

Nice work <!--emo&:)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/smile.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='smile.gif'><!--endemo-->

Just remembered a mistake from Chapter 18: <i>"The creature gradually immerged, its ugly mussel becoming more and more visible."</i> - "immerged" should be "emerged", and "mussel" should be "muzzle". Apart from that, no other things that I can see...keep it up <!--emo&;)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/wink.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='wink.gif'><!--endemo-->

That_Annoying_Kid

man I made a mistake leaving fan-fic


I'm gonna have to catch up here, it looks sweet!