Should've Backed Down -collab-

CatCopCatCop Join Date: 2003-08-28 Member: 20296Members, Constellation
edited February 2004 in Artwork Forum
Before I go on...
Drawing- Devin, Go visit his DA website <a href='http://blue-falcon.deviantart.com/' target='_blank'>http://blue-falcon.deviantart.com/</a>
CG- Mine, No point visiting mine, You have 75% posted here, And most of it sucks.

Anyways, So, I think I made a definite improvement in this one.
EXPLENATION-
Anyways.
In the upper one its just a little clash as you SHOULD see two swords, One you can barely see its by they grey haired guys head, Okay so theres a clash... First thing.
Middle thing, Yeah its the guys eye, But its the OTHER guys sword breaking, So the grey haired guys sword BROKE.
Last mini Panel you can see the guy is bleeding, He has a shard of sword in his hand, And you can see the broken sword, Whats left of the lower half, Hes obviously in pain.


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  • Mr_JeburtOMr_JeburtO Join Date: 2003-08-29 Member: 20340Members
    the blood needs to be lighter and whats that.... thing..... in the middle?
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  • CoolCookieCooksCoolCookieCooks Pretty Girl Join Date: 2003-05-18 Member: 16446Members, NS1 Playtester, Contributor, Constellation
    stop drawing and start skinning <!--emo&;)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/wink.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='wink.gif' /><!--endemo-->
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  • TransmissionTransmission Join Date: 2003-03-12 Member: 14456Members
    1) I have no clue what is going on.. is that a broken sword? (but that isn't your fault, since you're only the colouring)

    2) Some of the pencil lines look really icky, so prehaps removing them somehow, or inking the whole thing would be better.

    3) I think there is too much contrast bewteen dark areas and light areas. It seems offensive to the eye, almost.

    That my uneducated opinion. <!--emo&:)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/smile.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='smile.gif' /><!--endemo-->
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  • LancedresLancedres Join Date: 2003-09-01 Member: 20458Members
    <!--QuoteBegin-MR.JEBURTO+Feb 22 2004, 12:53 PM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> (MR.JEBURTO @ Feb 22 2004, 12:53 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> the blood needs to be lighter and whats that.... thing..... in the middle? <!--QuoteEnd--> </td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'> <!--QuoteEEnd-->
    You can see that the upper box holds the guy with the blue hair looking straight down at the guy with grey hair, they are fighting with swords by what i can see.

    Then the box in the middle is the eye of the blue haired man, reflecting the incoming sword of the grey haired guy.

    From what i understand the last box (the lower one) is the grey haired guy after having killed the blue haired guy. Looks like he shattered the sword in the process.

    I like the picture and the CG is very good. But as Transmission said, try inking all the picture <!--emo&::nerdy::--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/nerd.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='nerd.gif' /><!--endemo-->
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  • LikuLiku I, am the Somberlain. Join Date: 2003-01-10 Member: 12128Members
    <!--QuoteBegin--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> </td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin-->1) I have no clue what is going on..<!--QuoteEnd--></td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'><!--QuoteEEnd-->
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  • CatCopCatCop Join Date: 2003-08-28 Member: 20296Members, Constellation
    Should have explained...
    Anyways.
    In the upper one its just a little clash as you SHOULD see two swords, One you can barely see its by they grey haired guys head, Okay so theres a clash... First thing.
    Middle thing, Yeah its the guys eye, But its the OTHER guys sword breaking, So the grey haired guys sword BROKE.
    Last mini Panel you can see the guy is bleeding, He has a shard of sword in his hand, And you can see the broken sword, Whats left of the lower half, Hes obviously in pain.
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  • CatCopCatCop Join Date: 2003-08-28 Member: 20296Members, Constellation
    <!--QuoteBegin-CoolCookieCooks+Feb 22 2004, 12:13 PM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> (CoolCookieCooks @ Feb 22 2004, 12:13 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> stop drawing and start skinning <!--emo&;)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/wink.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='wink.gif' /><!--endemo--> <!--QuoteEnd--> </td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'> <!--QuoteEEnd-->
    Ahhh shush <!--emo&:D--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/biggrin.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='biggrin.gif' /><!--endemo-->
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  • MeanMrMustardMeanMrMustard Join Date: 2003-11-23 Member: 23456Members
    I dont like that kind of manga-style art anyway.
    But total confusion, when looking at this piece.


    Its like you have tried to sum up a 2-hour film is this one still image....and failed.

    Still, its a good drawing. <!--emo&:p--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/tounge.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='tounge.gif' /><!--endemo-->
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