Return Of Dark Harbinger

Ratfire

<div class="IPBDescription">Still worth the effort?</div> edited

hidden_snper

Really nice story, WRITE MORE! your style is good and i like your ideas about the TSA.

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john_sheu

F**k yeah, post 'em all! Finally a story by an author who values grammar and spelling as much as I do <!--emo&:p--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/tounge.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='tounge.gif' /><!--endemo-->

But yes, it is very well written; I would think it is eminently publishable.

Ratfire

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john_sheu

Nice, I have two questions though:
1. I think the bit about "forcing" Frontiersmen to use the on-board sludge seems a bit contrived.
2. Whatever happend to FriendlyFire?

Keep up the writing!

Ratfire

1. There not so much being "forced" to use the res towers on the ship, as Marcus is angry at how the TSA goes about their administation. There are a number of references in the official backstory/info that indicate the TSA is less than angelic in doing what it does.

2. Are you suggesting that Marcus should have shot his squad member, because the skulk attacked him?

Nuub

I think he was referring to the thing on Frontiersmen manual. That the nanos stop the bullets for hitting friendlies.

Ratfire

Ah, I completely forgot about that, but orginally that situation was drawn from an addendum to the FriendlyFire reference,

<!--QuoteBegin--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> </td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin-->In rare cases nano-gridlock has been known to interfere with this protection for the duration of a battle. <!--QuoteEnd--></td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'><!--QuoteEEnd-->



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Thats_Enough

waiting for more!!!

good writing so far <!--emo&:)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/smile.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='smile.gif' /><!--endemo--> keep it up

meatball

Great story, give us the rest <!--emo&:D--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/biggrin.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='biggrin.gif' /><!--endemo-->

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That_Annoying_Kid

wewt, it's always worth it to continue a story

Nuub

1 word. 1337

john_sheu

*ahem*

any more?

Ratfire

Yeah I'm working on the next few chapters, they tend to come together in pieces and get finished separately. Sorry it takes so long <!--emo&:(--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/sad.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='sad.gif' /><!--endemo--> but I like to think that it adds some quality. The whole process has been an inspirational spurt, I started writing this story about a year and a half ago as TAK can tell you. At the time he had a quest going to have his name on the last respondant for every single post in this forum <!--emo&:p--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/tounge.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='tounge.gif' /><!--endemo-->

Thanks for your interest it's really inspiring!


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brute_force

I like this story. Please continue <!--emo&:D--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/biggrin.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='biggrin.gif' /><!--endemo-->

Thats_Enough

Want... more...

Ratfire

Addendum to the above post, I probably won't be posting anything for at least a few days, finals are coming up and that's a lot of studying. Also, I'm trying to make all the chapters, including the unpublished ones a little longer for a better read.
So if anyone has any ideas or corrections, I'd be glad to see them.
Thanks.


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Ratfire

Woot forums back online! I'm still working on DH, but the goings are very slow, lots of RL events happening right now. Thanks to everyone who drops me feedback.

BadMouth

im just wondering, how long does it take for u to wirte one chapter?

Ratfire

Between edititing, rewriting, and adding on over time, probably between 10-20 hours. Which is spread out over the course of quite a few weeks. <!--emo&:)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/smile-fix.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='smile-fix.gif' /><!--endemo-->