I'm assuming you want c&c, as well as this is your production.
I don't really like the joke, but that's just me.
The young guy looks like a girl, but maybe that's intentional. Confused me a bit.
There's waay too much underglow for the lightsabres in the last frame.
Consider redoing your layout of the word bubbles and frames, it doesn't work that well.
You might want to put a border around the orange narration box, since that will make it look better.
The bolts from the guns in the last frame look really bad as they are too large, and their prefectly straight apprearence mimicks the appearence of the light sabres too closely. Maybe make them small round elipses?
Character design is really good. I like your backgrounds alot as well. The overall style is very good as well. <!--emo&:)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/smile.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='smile.gif' /><!--endemo-->
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<!--QuoteBegin-Transmission+May 4 2004, 08:21 PM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> (Transmission @ May 4 2004, 08:21 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> The bolts from the guns in the last frame look really bad as they are too large, <!--QuoteEnd--> </td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'> <!--QuoteEEnd--> What guns?
<!--QuoteBegin-Transmission+May 5 2004, 03:21 AM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> (Transmission @ May 5 2004, 03:21 AM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> The bolts from the guns in the last frame look really bad as they are too large, and their prefectly straight apprearence mimicks the appearence of the light sabres too closely. Maybe make them small round elipses? <!--QuoteEnd--></td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'><!--QuoteEEnd--> I agree
Decent art, but the joke falls flat on its face <!--emo&:(--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/sad.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='sad.gif' /><!--endemo-->.
Good luck, you have some awesome potential. <!--emo&:)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/smile.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='smile.gif' /><!--endemo-->
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I don't really like the joke, but that's just me.
The young guy looks like a girl, but maybe that's intentional. Confused me a bit.
There's waay too much underglow for the lightsabres in the last frame.
Consider redoing your layout of the word bubbles and frames, it doesn't work that well.
You might want to put a border around the orange narration box, since that will make it look better.
The bolts from the guns in the last frame look really bad as they are too large, and their prefectly straight apprearence mimicks the appearence of the light sabres too closely. Maybe make them small round elipses?
Character design is really good. I like your backgrounds alot as well. The overall style is very good as well. <!--emo&:)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/smile.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='smile.gif' /><!--endemo-->
What guns?
The cave man's head/body changes sizes.
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I agree
Other tan that i think its great