The Terror Of Ns (poem)
Rusty1
Join Date: 2004-07-08 Member: 29791Members
Join Date: 2004-07-08 Member: 29791Members
<div class="IPBDescription">A look at Ns through a marines eyes</div> <b>The Terror Of Ns</b>
"It's time to move" The Commander said,
And off on our mission us soldiers tread.
We marched along with our weapons raised,
For one sight of movement and our barrels are at blase.
We moved as a pack, in rows of two,
For if you got lost they wont come back for you.
Everyone knows a marine should have no fear,
Everyone knows a marine wouldn't shed a tear.
But still that feeling sits in me strong,
That feeling when your certain something is going to go wrong.
But still I feel safe amongst the others,
To me they are family and we are all brothers.
Everything is dead silent, no one makes a sound,
Apart from our boots trodging along the ground.
Even with these heavy bags we lift,
We move so quickly we move very swift.
Suddenly I fall and hit the ground,
It hurt so much I did not make a sound.
I finally came to mind and the pain got worse,
It felt like my backside had suddenly burst.
I slowly examind it with my right parm.
But I soon looked down and was quite alarmed.
There was an unusual amount of blood dripping from my hand,
Also a small puddle which started to expand.
All of a sudden I got quite dizzy,
I couldn't think cause I felt all wizzy.
Everything was weird, everything was wak,
When suddenly my head dropped and everything went black.
To be continued...........
Do you like it so far? I'm working on the second one, it should be done soon.
<span style='color:red'><b>™®-Rusty- 2004 'This peom was worded by -Rusty- and it is ©'</b></span>
"It's time to move" The Commander said,
And off on our mission us soldiers tread.
We marched along with our weapons raised,
For one sight of movement and our barrels are at blase.
We moved as a pack, in rows of two,
For if you got lost they wont come back for you.
Everyone knows a marine should have no fear,
Everyone knows a marine wouldn't shed a tear.
But still that feeling sits in me strong,
That feeling when your certain something is going to go wrong.
But still I feel safe amongst the others,
To me they are family and we are all brothers.
Everything is dead silent, no one makes a sound,
Apart from our boots trodging along the ground.
Even with these heavy bags we lift,
We move so quickly we move very swift.
Suddenly I fall and hit the ground,
It hurt so much I did not make a sound.
I finally came to mind and the pain got worse,
It felt like my backside had suddenly burst.
I slowly examind it with my right parm.
But I soon looked down and was quite alarmed.
There was an unusual amount of blood dripping from my hand,
Also a small puddle which started to expand.
All of a sudden I got quite dizzy,
I couldn't think cause I felt all wizzy.
Everything was weird, everything was wak,
When suddenly my head dropped and everything went black.
To be continued...........
Do you like it so far? I'm working on the second one, it should be done soon.
<span style='color:red'><b>™®-Rusty- 2004 'This peom was worded by -Rusty- and it is ©'</b></span>
Comments
very good tho i think <!--emo&:D--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/biggrin.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='biggrin.gif' /><!--endemo-->
Someone ran out of rhymes <!--emo&:D--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/biggrin.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='biggrin.gif' /><!--endemo-->
But very nice lol
Keep it up with feedback I need as much as I can get so I can finish the second edition, it's almost done. <!--emo&:p--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/tounge.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='tounge.gif' /><!--endemo-->
Seriously though, he should get one.
Fizzy
Busy
FoShizzy
wizzy
Lizzy
cantimusy
Hissy
Sissy
Missy
Controversy
Si
Very nice poem BTW.