Song Lyrics
Some_tall_guy1
Join Date: 2003-05-22 Member: 16601Members
Join Date: 2003-05-22 Member: 16601Members
<div class="IPBDescription">"remember the day"</div> So I watched the movie "bang bang your dead" last night, and it kind of inspired me to write a song. I'm working on creating a rythm for it and playing with different words a lot still, but heres what I have so far. It's pretty dark too.
Post your crits.
*warning* possibly strong material *warning*
Remember the Day
You hear the silent screams of fate.
Your tomb speaks of the sins you have commited.
You watch as the innocent tease and play.
And as you lay, cold, dead, you remember the day.
Get up. (to feel the sword of the world)
Sit down. (and let your thoughts tear your mind)
Do you even have a choice? (it all ends up the same)
You feel the cold metal that you hold.
The beautiful melody that pours from it.
It sings to you, there is no other way.
The entire world will remember this day.
Get up. (to feel the sword of the world)
Sit down. (and let your thoughts tear your mind)
Do you even have a choice? (it all ends up the same)
And now as you watch the world
As your written tomb gossips with the living
As the innocent go about their day
You realize that only you, remember that day.
You think the world really cares
but all you are is just another pawn of fate
Get up. (to feel the sword of the world)
Sit down. (and let your thoughts tear your mind)
Do you even have a choice? (it all ends up the same)
Post your crits.
*warning* possibly strong material *warning*
Remember the Day
You hear the silent screams of fate.
Your tomb speaks of the sins you have commited.
You watch as the innocent tease and play.
And as you lay, cold, dead, you remember the day.
Get up. (to feel the sword of the world)
Sit down. (and let your thoughts tear your mind)
Do you even have a choice? (it all ends up the same)
You feel the cold metal that you hold.
The beautiful melody that pours from it.
It sings to you, there is no other way.
The entire world will remember this day.
Get up. (to feel the sword of the world)
Sit down. (and let your thoughts tear your mind)
Do you even have a choice? (it all ends up the same)
And now as you watch the world
As your written tomb gossips with the living
As the innocent go about their day
You realize that only you, remember that day.
You think the world really cares
but all you are is just another pawn of fate
Get up. (to feel the sword of the world)
Sit down. (and let your thoughts tear your mind)
Do you even have a choice? (it all ends up the same)
Comments
I can just imagine your lyrics to a Silver And Cold-esque rhythm.
Verr nice.
j/k they're not too bad, now record yourself singing them to guitar.
Soooo... This is a song about high-school shootings, yes? Evidence suggests that people who stage such spectacular shows often leave clues in advance, perhaps in a subconscious desire for someone to take notice and talk them out of it. So if that's the case, let me be the first to tell you: Don't do it.
<!--QuoteBegin--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> </td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin-->Soooo... This is a song about high-school shootings, yes? Evidence suggests that people who stage such spectacular shows often leave clues in advance, perhaps in a subconscious desire for someone to take notice and talk them out of it. So if that's the case, let me be the first to tell you: Don't do it. <!--QuoteEnd--></td></tr></table><div class='postcolor'><!--QuoteEEnd--> lol thx for the advice, but be assured I'm just fine <!--emo&:p--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html//emoticons/tounge.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='tounge.gif' /><!--endemo-->
I will, YAAARRRR!!
Now i have a good excuse, thanks alot STG.
No, my precioussss. We won't tell them any more details, noooooo.
Serious though, nice stuff you made there. Yarrr.