Ns_freighter

neag

<div class="IPBDescription">Backstory</div>I canged my map name to ns_Freighter.

Here is as short story about it

Ns_freighter

Log
As I write this my finger are starting to get numb from the cold.
I've been hiding by the main computers cooling unit for 6 hours.
They don't seam to notice me when I'm here maybe they don't like cold or maybe they can't smell me.
They are at least not bothering me.
I'll die here I know that and have made my peace.

If any one finds this they will want to know what happened.
I don't know how they arrived, I and the rest of the crew got the first sign when we discovered that one food storage had been emptied.
Our captain was fast and immediately had the entire ship on alert.
But It was to late, as we were getting our weapons they attacked.
The bridge and the engine room was overwhelmed and lost almost immediately, I was lucky.
I Tom, Paul, Linn ,Robert and the Captain were only attacked by a small one and Robert got of a couple of lucky shot and killed it.
We retreated to the navigational computer core and waited fore two days two silent days. Then they attacked,
there were three batlike things and a dozen small ones.
We where trying to hold them of at the left cargo transport area.
Tom got a dart in his chest and went down screaming screaming.
We were about to get over run when the whole ship shook there was a great bang fallowed by the scream of twisting metal.
We were throw to the ground.
The emergency doors shut tight and most of them were left on the out side. The captain was ripped apart by one that I then gunned down, the other one simply exploded, Paul took most of the blast.
We drew straws on who should stay, Robert and Linn used the life pods.
That is wa
Theere is a one here now.

Flayra

Short, sweet and very dramatic.  Good one, neag.  I loved it!

Jedisar

It was okay, just make sure that you spell check it next time..and put it either on a webpage, or save it as a Rich Text Document (A Word pad Save feature that you must pick) and attach it. Background stories aren't supposed to be in the post on the board. Dunno why, but it's Mole's Rules.

Moleculor

Ach, that was short enough to be fine. I'll change the rule so that it says that short ones, under a page are fine. We've just had a few stories that were so large they took up two, three, and four posts.

Greedo

There was definitely some good suspense in this short little piece here.  Personally, I would have preffered some deeper narration, though I think what you wrote is just fine.  Narration can slow down a story if done incorrectly, and this is a story that might benefit from the lack of definition.