damned.... Guess i just got flamed I tried to write my own, didn't have any inspiration at the time, might pick it up when i get some (it's on my palm <!--emo&:p--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/tounge.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='tounge.gif'><!--endemo-->) I just suddenly got the 'feeling'
I just thought u meant the development of the story and everybody participating in it
the head poked out from the vent. Jack was about to let loose a volly of bullets, when the head spoke.
"STOP. DONT SHOOT."
The men looked on as a marine extracted himself from the vent and began to tell his story
"i'm..."
"No time" jack interupted "Where does this vent lead?"
"To the backup armoury, well, thats where i came from, not sure if i could get back there though"
"Why not?"
"there was a big drop, i only carried on because i heard you."
"Can you show us the way?"
"uhh, sure."
The squad follow the newcomer into the vent. Jack takes up the rear, covering the behind. they soon come to the drop he was talking about. they set up a system of boosts, each person boosts the one infront of them. once the last man is up, Jack fires his jetpack and with the last few gases in the bottom, only manages and extended jump
His fingers feel the edge and grab on to it, but the hours ot tension and fighting have taken its toll on him. he feels his grip begin to loosed, than a strong arm grabs his wrist.
Kenji, straining every muscle in his arm helps Jack up and they carry on, crawling through the blackness.
A small spot of light filters down the tunnel. the men crawl with new enthusiasm, hurrying towards the light. the faint breeze is getting stringer
soon, they are all standing in a large vent chimney. The huge fan is whirring above them, sucking air up. they climb a ladder it is all they can do to hold on against the wind. they enter a door maintenace access and go through it.
It is a brightly lit area, with sealable doors and a fully functioning turret factory.
"Why is this place untouched?" Jack wanted to know
"The turrets heal, but the main reaon os the only door that can be opened from the outside is the one we came through. skulks cant get up the chimney because they get sucked into the fan. it till only be when the aliens manage to evolve to the heavier fade that this place will be under attack."
"What made you leave here?"
"I was in the comm chair looking at the area, when i saw your squad. I heard you talking about the armoury and knew where you where, so i came and helped you."
yay! they amde it!! yay!! im on the edge of my seat wondering how this stopry will turn out.
Hey, sorry for all teh typos, its 4:00 am here and im kinda tired, so. Yeah, ill qwrite more tommorow when im at school in computer class. till then, tata.
That_Annoying_KidSire of TitlesJoin Date: 2003-03-01Member: 14175Members, Constellation
(bwahahahahaha <!--emo&:D--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/biggrin.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='biggrin.gif'><!--endemo-->, sry I couldn't resist) He knew that this form could built, and it did, dropping many of the Spike chambers and healing towers around the group of cylinders with squares attached to them. he knew that the humans used these to refill the sticks that caused pain, the OC's would guard and destroy them, while the dc's would heal incase the humans made a push to try and save this "backup armoury", numerous guns and jps melted as acid covered spikes ripped into the room...he chuckled
<!--QuoteBegin---Lucid_Reality-+May 7 2003, 03:54 AM--></span><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td><b>QUOTE</b> (-Lucid_Reality- @ May 7 2003, 03:54 AM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> Hey, sorry for all teh typos, its 4:00 am here and im kinda tired, so. Yeah, ill qwrite more tommorow when im at school in computer class. till then, tata. <!--QuoteEnd--></td></tr></table><span class='postcolor'><!--QuoteEEnd--> I told you to go to sleep... nothing good ever comes out of your sleep deprived <b>mind</b> <!--emo&:p--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/tounge.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='tounge.gif'><!--endemo-->
hehe you typed your post at 4:27 pm <!--emo&:p--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/tounge.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='tounge.gif'><!--endemo-->
Side note- im lazy, so Jack is gonna be talking in Green. Kenji in orange. And the marine in Red.
Planet A77342 Outpost ZX43 21:32 Galactic time:
They were now in the "base" hidden in the vent. It was a nifty little idea jack thought. Hide a base where you couldnt be bothered by little Sh**'s. But then again, you couldnt prevent them from growing, and getting bigger, or prevent them from having thier ... biosystem was it?...from growing, and thier territory expanding. It didnt matter as jack talked to the marine that led them here.
<span style='color:green'> "What is your name soldier?"</span>
<span style='color:red'> "I am Private Trent Kerensky sir."</span>
<span style='color:orange'>"How the hell did you survive in here for so long??" </span>
<span style='color:red'>"Well sir, like i said, only the biggest ones can get in here, all the others get sucked up into the fan. Eventuall ythey must have learned that and stoped coming." </span>
<span style='color:green'>"Alright. What are you doin here anyway?" </span>
<span style='color:red'>"I was a marine in that base you were at earlier.we were attacked and got decimated, i escaped and the commander dropped a commchair here.Then i guess he died <!--emo&:(--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/sad.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='sad.gif'><!--endemo-->" </span>
They decided to drop the subject for they could see he was stricken with sadness.
<span style='color:green'>"Dont worry, well get out fo here alive. If not, ill never see my sister again, and im all she has left. So no, we WILL get out of here alive. But one thing evades my logic. How to turrets heal?" </span>
<span style='color:red'>"Well sir, these turrets are a small modificatioon of mine. Im something of a technological genius." </span>The kid runs over to a small box, and pulls out a pistol looking thing.<span style='color:red'>"This is my new welder i made. It has all the features of the old one, but its smaller, and you can keep your pistol as it doesnt take make the marine too heavy for both and a main gun."</span>He runs over to another box adn pulls out another pistol thingy.<span style='color:red'>"And this sir, is my new pistol. It has the accuray,and fireing rate of the old one, but its has twice as large a clip size, and its bullets are able to be used inside a ship without breaking the ships seal and letting in vacuum. The bullets are...kinda smart, they sense metal or flesh, and either shatter on metal so they dont puncture, or harden for flesh, so they dont stop." </span>
All the two officers could do is stare at this kid that had jsut made weapons from TSA's top lab experts....better. They snaped out of it, and Jack grabbed the pistol, as he was the resident pistol ****, and Kenji grabbed the welder, as he was teh technician. They thanked the kid, and went back to the squad to address them on the current situation.
<span style='color:green'>"Alright apes, listen up. Heh, sorry guys, i watches starship troopers before i came on this mission heh, ok anyways. The infestation is on this outpost. We obviously know tehy have 3 main ..umm... what are those things?"</span>
<span style='color:red'>"Hives sir."</span>
<span style='color:green'>"Right hives. ok, they have 3 hives. So they have big boys and they probably have more evolutions too. Theyll be stronger, faster, and more agile than those that hq has us training against. So we need to be much more careful. So, me and kenji and trent will get a plan set up, you guys get some rest and ammo, and get some food for gods sake, you look like youve been through a onos arse. Diiiiiismissed" </span>
With that the squad broke up. Kenji went over to the command console, and got in it. When he sat down the thing told him to close it. So he did. Then he got an overview of the whole outpost. He used the pointer thingy to move over to the dock, and he saw aliens running around the ship, dragging the onos corpse away. Along with the bodies of dead marines. This puzzled him and made him sick. He followed them for a while what he saw suprised him.......They buried the dead outside the outpost. This shocked him to no end, and he was greatly disturbed.
He stepped out and plopped down on the ground. He looked around and saw a nice comfy matress sitting by teh wall. <span style='color:green'> "Trent, mind if i sleep on this thing over here?"</span>
<span style='color:red'>"Go ahead sir, im goin to hop in the console and watch for developements." </span>
<span style='color:green'> "Ok, go ahead and let me know if anything happens, and try and see if you can get a plan goin."</span>
Trent nodded, and plopped on the mattress and instantly fell asleep. He woke up to see catherine standing over him. And guessed it was a dream. He smiled then stood up.
<span style='color:green'>"Why are you here Catherine?" </span>
<span style='color:purple'>"I came to tell you that you are in danger, and you need to wake up now." </span>
<span style='color:green'> "What?"</span>
<span style='color:purple'>"Wake up Jack, wake up." </span>
ummm, what to write... <!--emo&:(--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/sad.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='sad.gif'><!--endemo-->
<span style='color:purple'> Wake up Jack, Wake up, Wake up</span>
The voice was fading, and the bed he was lying on was shaking. all of a sudden, the voice grew stronger again
<span style='color:orange'>I SAID WAKE THE HELL UP SIR, WE ARE UNDER ATTACK </span>
Jack snapped back to reality, instantly alert. the years or training had finally paid off. his mind was functioning before his eyes were even fully open.
<span style='color:green'> Whats going on Kenji?</span>
<span style='color:orange'> The fades are making their way through the ventilation system a are about to pay us a visit. we need to get out. now</span>
Kenji had managed to get the observatory working, and the localised motion traking had kicked in. the familiar blue circles appeared on on jacks hud - they meant bad news. he could see a line of them, 5 or 6, all advancing towards their position. their progress was slow, painfully slow, but they were on their way.
Jack jumped in the comm chair and scanned the area. 5 fades all slowly crawling through the vent. they werent in a hurry, they had all the time in the world.
He gave them 5 min, tops
Jacks mind was in overdrive. his veiw jumped to the docking bay. the observatory let out a high ping and the spatters of blood became apoparent. nothing else though, the area was clear.
His plan went into action. it was risky, but it was the only hope of ever getting off this rock. he sold all the structures. one by one, the turrets shut down and the nanos absorbed them back into the sludge. the resources crept back up.
The distress beacon would call in another dropship loaded with reainforcements that was waiting in orbit above them. it would have to get close to the surface fo the teleport to work, but Jack was looking for something.
He had overheard enough conversations between the other officers to know about the secrets of any base, he was just hoping he could find it in time.
He had found it! there it was, the answer to all his problems, and maybe everybody elses.
The fades were very close now, just a bit longer and they would be knocking at the door.
The observatory let out a set of high pithched pings as jack scanned the way back to the docking bay. there were strange structures with a spiky ball on top on them, they looked dangerous. best to avoid them. he consulted his map of the base, there did seem to be a relatively safe route back to the docking bay. they would have a few structures to deal with, but hopefully a few rounds of hmg will take them out without a problem. he memorised the route they would take. one wrong turn would mean a slow and painful death. He started the timer and activated the distress beacon. The fades had made it into the chimney now, and were climbing the ladder.
Jack Jumped out of the comm chair
<span style='color:green'> Follow me</span>
Without waiting for a reply, he ran out of the other door.
The few marines that were left all turned and followed him. better to risk death in a last ditch attempt than face it full on.
The route ran through jacks brain. Left, second right, right again, first left...
His radio crackled to life
"OK men, move out and keep watchful"
He grabbed his headset and called the officer.
<span style='color:green'>Sir, this is petty officer Jack. do not let the dropship leave, we are on our way out. tell the pilot to be ready for takeoff at maximum speed </span>
"Roger that Officer, i dont know what you are playing at, but it had better be worth it"
<span style='color:green'> Dont worry sir, it will be</span>
third left, right at the end of the corridoor, through the big double doors and...
Jack stopped abruptly. the rest of the squad piled into him. They all fired at the same time. the noise was deafening, but the large mass of structures shook and died.
they ran on, eventually coming to the docking bay. the marines had set up a defensive perimeter, keeping watchful eyes on the many shadows and vents.
As the office saw jack and his men, he ordered his troops to retreat and board the ship. Jack and his squad followd right behind them. no sooner than the last man was onboard, the pilot closed the doors and started to lift off. all of a sudden, the all of the karaah beasts burst through the doors, spraying their gases and spewing rockets. the ship rocked but continiued to accelerate, shooting upwards until they were far out of range of even the most powerful.
5, 4, 3, 2, 1, 0. A blinding flash of light lite up the sky followed by a deafaning explosion. a huge shock wave ripped through the base, blasting concrete as if it were styrofoam. soon, the familiar mushroom cloud appeared over the remains of the base...
END
i know, i know, i ended it it seemed to have lost its popularity. if you like it, say so, if you dont, feel free to carry on from where Lucid left off. whatever you do, i for one will probably not be contributing to it anymore. maybe we could compile the whole story and release it to the other people out their. It was great fun writing it, and a good idea lucid.
PS, did you spot my deliberate mistake in that post?
(there may be lots, but there is one i am thinking of in particular - im not talking about spelling or grammer either btw)
nice finish. i guess its all over now. oh well, it was good while it lasted. <!--emo&:D--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/biggrin.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='biggrin.gif'><!--endemo-->!
Heh nice guys nice, ill try to get it alld own adn put it as one big story for release <!--emo&;)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/wink.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='wink.gif'><!--endemo--> Maybe we can get it on the inspiration post.
Heh goodowrk guys. And i was kinda thinking of ending it, jsut didnt know how, and you did so there we go.
Btw, NICE mistake ! hahahaha if ya dont know guys, there istn 74 minutes in an hour. <!--emo&;)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/wink.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='wink.gif'><!--endemo-->
That_Annoying_KidSire of TitlesJoin Date: 2003-03-01Member: 14175Members, Constellation
damn, I leave the forums for two days and it's over
grrr....
good work guys <!--emo&:D--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/biggrin.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='biggrin.gif'><!--endemo-->
its finished <!--emo&:D--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/biggrin.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='biggrin.gif'><!--endemo--> find the compiled story <a href='http://www.digitalbrain.com/ITforlife/Public%20Access/Intothedepthsofhell.doc' target='_blank'>here</a>
Comments
that's actually my first fan-fiction (not counting the rpg in)
Guess i just got flamed
I tried to write my own, didn't have any inspiration at the time, might pick it up when i get some (it's on my palm <!--emo&:p--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/tounge.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='tounge.gif'><!--endemo-->) I just suddenly got the 'feeling'
I just thought u meant the development of the story and everybody participating in it
I meant no [explitive deleted] you should write you own, in a good way, as I would probably like it.
<!--emo&:D--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/biggrin.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='biggrin.gif'><!--endemo-->
"STOP. DONT SHOOT."
The men looked on as a marine extracted himself from the vent and began to tell his story
"i'm..."
"No time" jack interupted "Where does this vent lead?"
"To the backup armoury, well, thats where i came from, not sure if i could get back there though"
"Why not?"
"there was a big drop, i only carried on because i heard you."
"Can you show us the way?"
"uhh, sure."
The squad follow the newcomer into the vent. Jack takes up the rear, covering the behind. they soon come to the drop he was talking about. they set up a system of boosts, each person boosts the one infront of them. once the last man is up, Jack fires his jetpack and with the last few gases in the bottom, only manages and extended jump
His fingers feel the edge and grab on to it, but the hours ot tension and fighting have taken its toll on him. he feels his grip begin to loosed, than a strong arm grabs his wrist.
Kenji, straining every muscle in his arm helps Jack up and they carry on, crawling through the blackness.
A small spot of light filters down the tunnel. the men crawl with new enthusiasm, hurrying towards the light. the faint breeze is getting stringer
soon, they are all standing in a large vent chimney. The huge fan is whirring above them, sucking air up. they climb a ladder it is all they can do to hold on against the wind. they enter a door maintenace access and go through it.
It is a brightly lit area, with sealable doors and a fully functioning turret factory.
"Why is this place untouched?" Jack wanted to know
"The turrets heal, but the main reaon os the only door that can be opened from the outside is the one we came through. skulks cant get up the chimney because they get sucked into the fan. it till only be when the aliens manage to evolve to the heavier fade that this place will be under attack."
"What made you leave here?"
"I was in the comm chair looking at the area, when i saw your squad. I heard you talking about the armoury and knew where you where, so i came and helped you."
Hey, sorry for all teh typos, its 4:00 am here and im kinda tired, so. Yeah, ill qwrite more tommorow when im at school in computer class. till then, tata.
He knew that this form could built, and it did, dropping many of the Spike chambers and healing towers around the group of cylinders with squares attached to them. he knew that the humans used these to refill the sticks that caused pain, the OC's would guard and destroy them, while the dc's would heal incase the humans made a push to try and save this "backup armoury", numerous guns and jps melted as acid covered spikes ripped into the room...he chuckled
I told you to go to sleep... nothing good ever comes out of your sleep deprived <b>mind</b> <!--emo&:p--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/tounge.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='tounge.gif'><!--endemo-->
Nor mine, as it quite clearly shows.
heh
damn....
like i said, the only way you can attack us is to get fades - anything lighter will be sucked into the fan, even teh fatteh
Planet A77342
Outpost ZX43
21:32 Galactic time:
They were now in the "base" hidden in the vent. It was a nifty little idea jack thought. Hide a base where you couldnt be bothered by little Sh**'s. But then again, you couldnt prevent them from growing, and getting bigger, or prevent them from having thier ... biosystem was it?...from growing, and thier territory expanding. It didnt matter as jack talked to the marine that led them here.
<span style='color:green'> "What is your name soldier?"</span>
<span style='color:red'> "I am Private Trent Kerensky sir."</span>
<span style='color:orange'>"How the hell did you survive in here for so long??" </span>
<span style='color:red'>"Well sir, like i said, only the biggest ones can get in here, all the others get sucked up into the fan. Eventuall ythey must have learned that and stoped coming." </span>
<span style='color:green'>"Alright. What are you doin here anyway?" </span>
<span style='color:red'>"I was a marine in that base you were at earlier.we were attacked and got decimated, i escaped and the commander dropped a commchair here.Then i guess he died <!--emo&:(--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/sad.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='sad.gif'><!--endemo-->" </span>
They decided to drop the subject for they could see he was stricken with sadness.
<span style='color:green'>"Dont worry, well get out fo here alive. If not, ill never see my sister again, and im all she has left. So no, we WILL get out of here alive. But one thing evades my logic. How to turrets heal?" </span>
<span style='color:red'>"Well sir, these turrets are a small modificatioon of mine. Im something of a technological genius." </span>The kid runs over to a small box, and pulls out a pistol looking thing.<span style='color:red'>"This is my new welder i made. It has all the features of the old one, but its smaller, and you can keep your pistol as it doesnt take make the marine too heavy for both and a main gun."</span>He runs over to another box adn pulls out another pistol thingy.<span style='color:red'>"And this sir, is my new pistol. It has the accuray,and fireing rate of the old one, but its has twice as large a clip size, and its bullets are able to be used inside a ship without breaking the ships seal and letting in vacuum. The bullets are...kinda smart, they sense metal or flesh, and either shatter on metal so they dont puncture, or harden for flesh, so they dont stop." </span>
All the two officers could do is stare at this kid that had jsut made weapons from TSA's top lab experts....better. They snaped out of it, and Jack grabbed the pistol, as he was the resident pistol ****, and Kenji grabbed the welder, as he was teh technician. They thanked the kid, and went back to the squad to address them on the current situation.
<span style='color:green'>"Alright apes, listen up. Heh, sorry guys, i watches starship troopers before i came on this mission heh, ok anyways. The infestation is on this outpost. We obviously know tehy have 3 main ..umm... what are those things?"</span>
<span style='color:red'>"Hives sir."</span>
<span style='color:green'>"Right hives. ok, they have 3 hives. So they have big boys and they probably have more evolutions too. Theyll be stronger, faster, and more agile than those that hq has us training against. So we need to be much more careful. So, me and kenji and trent will get a plan set up, you guys get some rest and ammo, and get some food for gods sake, you look like youve been through a onos arse. Diiiiiismissed" </span>
With that the squad broke up. Kenji went over to the command console, and got in it. When he sat down the thing told him to close it. So he did. Then he got an overview of the whole outpost. He used the pointer thingy to move over to the dock, and he saw aliens running around the ship, dragging the onos corpse away. Along with the bodies of dead marines. This puzzled him and made him sick. He followed them for a while what he saw suprised him.......They buried the dead outside the outpost. This shocked him to no end, and he was greatly disturbed.
He stepped out and plopped down on the ground. He looked around and saw a nice comfy matress sitting by teh wall.
<span style='color:green'> "Trent, mind if i sleep on this thing over here?"</span>
<span style='color:red'>"Go ahead sir, im goin to hop in the console and watch for developements." </span>
<span style='color:green'> "Ok, go ahead and let me know if anything happens, and try and see if you can get a plan goin."</span>
Trent nodded, and plopped on the mattress and instantly fell asleep. He woke up to see catherine standing over him. And guessed it was a dream. He smiled then stood up.
<span style='color:green'>"Why are you here Catherine?" </span>
<span style='color:purple'>"I came to tell you that you are in danger, and you need to wake up now." </span>
<span style='color:green'> "What?"</span>
<span style='color:purple'>"Wake up Jack, wake up." </span>
<!--emo&:0--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/wow.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='wow.gif'><!--endemo-->
ummm, what to write... <!--emo&:(--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/sad.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='sad.gif'><!--endemo-->
Planet A77342
Outpost ZX43
23:74 Galactic time:
<span style='color:purple'> Wake up Jack, Wake up, Wake up</span>
The voice was fading, and the bed he was lying on was shaking. all of a sudden, the voice grew stronger again
<span style='color:orange'>I SAID WAKE THE HELL UP SIR, WE ARE UNDER ATTACK </span>
Jack snapped back to reality, instantly alert. the years or training had finally paid off. his mind was functioning before his eyes were even fully open.
<span style='color:green'> Whats going on Kenji?</span>
<span style='color:orange'> The fades are making their way through the ventilation system a are about to pay us a visit. we need to get out. now</span>
Kenji had managed to get the observatory working, and the localised motion traking had kicked in. the familiar blue circles appeared on on jacks hud - they meant bad news. he could see a line of them, 5 or 6, all advancing towards their position. their progress was slow, painfully slow, but they were on their way.
Jack jumped in the comm chair and scanned the area. 5 fades all slowly crawling through the vent. they werent in a hurry, they had all the time in the world.
He gave them 5 min, tops
Jacks mind was in overdrive. his veiw jumped to the docking bay. the observatory let out a high ping and the spatters of blood became apoparent. nothing else though, the area was clear.
His plan went into action. it was risky, but it was the only hope of ever getting off this rock. he sold all the structures. one by one, the turrets shut down and the nanos absorbed them back into the sludge. the resources crept back up.
The distress beacon would call in another dropship loaded with reainforcements that was waiting in orbit above them. it would have to get close to the surface fo the teleport to work, but Jack was looking for something.
He had overheard enough conversations between the other officers to know about the secrets of any base, he was just hoping he could find it in time.
He had found it! there it was, the answer to all his problems, and maybe everybody elses.
The fades were very close now, just a bit longer and they would be knocking at the door.
The observatory let out a set of high pithched pings as jack scanned the way back to the docking bay. there were strange structures with a spiky ball on top on them, they looked dangerous. best to avoid them. he consulted his map of the base, there did seem to be a relatively safe route back to the docking bay. they would have a few structures to deal with, but hopefully a few rounds of hmg will take them out without a problem. he memorised the route they would take. one wrong turn would mean a slow and painful death. He started the timer and activated the distress beacon. The fades had made it into the chimney now, and were climbing the ladder.
Jack Jumped out of the comm chair
<span style='color:green'> Follow me</span>
Without waiting for a reply, he ran out of the other door.
The few marines that were left all turned and followed him. better to risk death in a last ditch attempt than face it full on.
The route ran through jacks brain. Left, second right, right again, first left...
His radio crackled to life
"OK men, move out and keep watchful"
He grabbed his headset and called the officer.
<span style='color:green'>Sir, this is petty officer Jack. do not let the dropship leave, we are on our way out. tell the pilot to be ready for takeoff at maximum speed </span>
"Roger that Officer, i dont know what you are playing at, but it had better be worth it"
<span style='color:green'> Dont worry sir, it will be</span>
third left, right at the end of the corridoor, through the big double doors and...
Jack stopped abruptly. the rest of the squad piled into him. They all fired at the same time. the noise was deafening, but the large mass of structures shook and died.
they ran on, eventually coming to the docking bay. the marines had set up a defensive perimeter, keeping watchful eyes on the many shadows and vents.
As the office saw jack and his men, he ordered his troops to retreat and board the ship. Jack and his squad followd right behind them. no sooner than the last man was onboard, the pilot closed the doors and started to lift off. all of a sudden, the all of the karaah beasts burst through the doors, spraying their gases and spewing rockets. the ship rocked but continiued to accelerate, shooting upwards until they were far out of range of even the most powerful.
5, 4, 3, 2, 1, 0. A blinding flash of light lite up the sky followed by a deafaning explosion. a huge shock wave ripped through the base, blasting concrete as if it were styrofoam. soon, the familiar mushroom cloud appeared over the remains of the base...
END
i know, i know, i ended it it seemed to have lost its popularity. if you like it, say so, if you dont, feel free to carry on from where Lucid left off. whatever you do, i for one will probably not be contributing to it anymore. maybe we could compile the whole story and release it to the other people out their. It was great fun writing it, and a good idea lucid.
PS, did you spot my deliberate mistake in that post?
(there may be lots, but there is one i am thinking of in particular - im not talking about spelling or grammer either btw)
Heh goodowrk guys. And i was kinda thinking of ending it, jsut didnt know how, and you did so there we go.
Btw, NICE mistake ! hahahaha if ya dont know guys, there istn 74 minutes in an hour. <!--emo&;)--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/wink.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='wink.gif'><!--endemo-->
grrr....
good work guys <!--emo&:D--><img src='http://www.unknownworlds.com/forums/html/emoticons/biggrin.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='biggrin.gif'><!--endemo-->
quite a masterpiece imo
it is a masterpiece
post something on the completed fan-fic thread
*notices its his sneakers burning*
"YEEeeEOWCH!"
Oh yeah, new post for a new story, and someone else can start it, im out of ideas atm.
*notices its his sneakers burning*
"YEEeeEOWCH!" <!--QuoteEnd--> </td></tr></table><span class='postcolor'> <!--QuoteEEnd-->
here we go again